The Golden - First Poem By faroseh

[faroseh 442]

Honestly, this is my first poem so I guess it's not perfect or below average

 

The Golden

 

When you hear the sound

When you die by the bound

When you get flung by the crowned

You see The Golden

There by the sky, the kingdom of the sea

A sea of The Golden

The Golden is rare

The Golden is in the air

By the repair

You see The Golden in the air by the repair

 

You get on the ramp;

In the camp

You get to fling by the mine

You go to the line

You aren't far from The Golden

Oh there it is, there it is!

I see The Golden

I took the Golden

 

The Firebird's envying, the Isida's tackling

None is winning

The Golden is gonna be by the kingdom of the sea,

By my tree

I've seen the sea

And The Golden

Edited March 2, 2018 by faroseh

[Hex 11,520]

Approved.

 

Edits:

Capitalized turret names.

 

Comic Sans ;-;

[Spit_Fyre 334]

I'm curious - is there a poem or poet you like?... and why do you like it/them?

[faroseh 442]

Approved.

 

Edits:

Capitalized turret names.

 

Comic Sans ;-;

Comic Sans? How come? I'm pretty sure I used Trebuchet MS.

[faroseh 442]

I'm curious - is there a poem or poet you like?... and why do you like it/them?

Well, I kinda like Edgar Allan Poe's poems mostly. I liked his poem called Annabel Lee and if you actually focus, you may see some similar words here and there since I've studied that poem. I might make a dictionary for this poem I've made here pretty soon.

[Spit_Fyre 334]

Well, I kinda like Edgar Allan Poe's poems mostly. I liked his poem called Annabel Lee and if you actually focus, you may see some similar words here and there since I've studied that poem. I might make a dictionary for this poem I've made here pretty soon.

I think a better idea than creating a dictionary for you poem is just mention a note with it saying that you are inspired by Edgar Allan Poe's Annabel Lee. That speaks volumes. This is only a suggestion ofcourse.

Edited December 17, 2016 by Spit_Fyre

[faroseh 442]

I think a better idea than creating a dictionary for you poem is just mention a note with it saying that you are inspired by Edgar Allan Poe's Annabel Lee. That speaks volumes. This is only a suggestion ofcourse.

Mhm, maybe.

[asifmehmood 1,576]

Some of your lines reminded me Eminem :P , b/w nice poem 

Edited December 17, 2016 by asifmehmood

[faroseh 442]

Some of your lines reminded me Eminem :P , b/w nice poem 

:v ty