Thank you.

Thank you for keeping our forum safe and clean :) I am sure that none of us will have the.....Kurtesy of being such an amazing helper as you were. The Kurt pun. I saw it coming the day you joined the team, I can't help myself :(

*slow clap* I was losing the will to live, but now I feel alive.

The idea is, that if the words you are using are limited, it is best to present them alone, so that they look greater in length than they already are. A spoiler is the best way.

Approved. -No edits A very ingeniuitive piece, the idea is disturbing, but meets the criteria of our Week 3 challenge. Although I won't be able to live in a world with external intestines, the others won't either. I am absolutely...gut-ted.

Approved. -No edits An interesting piece I must say, a bit more effort and length can turn this into a long awaited medieval series I have longed for. PS: I dream of eating lobster.

Approved. -No edits I will dare to say that this is the best humor piece I have ever read in the Amateur Writing Section. Although the idea has been inspired by The Dictator, it is, in its own way, a work of art. Good on ya. Looking forward to seeing more of these.

I'm pretty sure this article will become a forum mod relaxing place in a few days. The interview was hilarious.

Approved. - Multiple additions of commas, addition of speech marks, capitalization of letters - Addition of pronouns - Spelling correction The concept isn't original. Although it is better executed than the last one, the whole ' my daughter is missing but I'll invite the policeman for tea anyways' concept was cliché, although your actual writing ability is getting better gradually.

A basic method film-makers and novel writers specially use to keep their quality at the maximum level is to keep the number of people limited if the plot isn't strong enough. For example, survival movies are ultimately based simply; survival of the lead character and human kind. But more complex movies with more in-depth plots such as Lord Of The Rings and Sci-Fi movies require more characters to fit in each scene. What I am suggesting is, if you don't have a deep enough plot for your story, don't squeeze in too many characters, which you unfortunately did in your previous series.

Approved. - Few removals of grammatically and contextually incorrect words - Changes in future/ present perfect tenses The plot, unlike last time, is really simple and deep, although you should try to execute it with the least complexity. The abduction was cliché for me, but I'm sure the plot will deepen overtime. A justifiable start overall!

Approved. - Multiple phrase adjustments - Removal of unnecessary capital letters - Multiple additions of pronouns The series, for me, had alot of potential. But it was executed in a way which was too hasty and too complicated, with addition of too many characters which didn't fit the plot well. The overall story was full of ripoffs, although I will say that your grammar has improved substantially.

Losers bracket *cough*

Approved. - Rectification of a 1st and 3rd form mistake - Correction of the usage of word "loose", it is written with two 'O's when being referred to escape or getting away. An interesting twist! I do find it peculiar that you used the word Night-Sisters in a way which hasn't been seen before, although I will say that the expression is a bit dull.

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The rank requirement is a new feature; mr.Doom here became an honorary mult before this requirement was implemented.

Approved. - Multiple addition of pronouns - Removal of 'unnecessary' adjectives and linking verbs - Changed excessively bright text color Personally, I feel like this plot is reaching a dead end. The characters are just showing up, getting killed and leaving minor clues, which is something a reader doesn't really admire. Although your grammar is gradually improving since your first sequel, the background of all the characters is weak, and virtually hanging by a thread.

Approved. - One spelling correction - Removal of a factually incorrect sentence Given the time you had to make this, I'd say it is a pretty valid article. There are little niblets of humor to munch on while the slightly boring article topic is discussed neatly. I wouldn't suggest any improvements, because the subject being discussed doesn't have many things to talk about.

Aww, ain't he the cutest lil' thing :P

The rock I'm currently using as a computer requires about 2-3 wall smashes to put it into sleep mode. It is a lot of effort but it is better than leaving it on; I once woke up to see my room completely wrecked, with the faint outline of " I will rock your room" scraped onto my wall, so I take no chances. What does your rock do?

Funny I see, approve I must. -No grammar edits The article is an excellent piece of well structured humour, and the plot is barking good! *Cough* Looking forward to seeing the upcoming installments.

Approved. -Minor spelling corrections - Multiple additions of pronouns A much better sequel to the endlessly long fight scene from the previous one, it seems you took my advice to heart!

Approving your own articles Thug life level 900

Revolving your story around strong emotions and emphasizing the importance of the characters usually removes most plot holes that arise when the fight scenes are too long. The pronouns can't be taught here, I'd advise using a guide, consulting teachers and comparing your original article to the one that I edited above. It won't come to you spontaneously, it's a gradual process.