Approved. Excellent story, I enjoy the description and the light-hearted enjoyment of a Firebird match in TO, especially its relatability. You describe the Firebird-to-Firebird interactions perfectly. I'm thinking that you can fix your sentence flow a bit because it felt choppy with the "I... I... I..." structure, so you can try to vary up your sentences with different sentence styles (simple, complex, compound, sentence starts) in future pieces. Overall, great work; I'm very excited for more content from you! Edits:

- Not crashing it every time it plays. - Not making me have to reload EVERY SINGLE WEBPAGE I HAVE ON OTHER TABS when I log on quickly to get my premium bonus - Adding gifts in the garage (can upload it later, but these are my source of self confidence and joy so I'd want them back, please) - Not lagging like it's 1999 and the internet has barely begun when I get into any battle. - Not turning my tank into a kamikaze pilot every time the computer lags. - Some issues with graphics with me. The skybox loads before the map, the foreground before the background, etc etc... - More coming soon, I just need to get up and take a short 5 min walk.

A very big congratulations to @Sacrifice for becoming Newspaper Reporter Candidate! I knew you'd make it there, good luck and enjoy the journey.

A map can be created by many means, I hope that made sense. Will someone design a new mapmaking technology?

Hey there, sorry for taking so long senioritis has struck because I hang out with seniors too much xdd. I'll take care of it soon.

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I'm not sure what this is, but hey, at least free question avoidment! What's your favorite word?

A person's ability to answer a question depends on the person's knowledge as well as the context of a question. Don't you ever find yourself unable to answer a question because you have no context about it?

Approved. Excecllent story, can't wait for another chapter! I really liked the personal aspect of the story, which lets the reader almost get to experience what you as the writer was going through. I'm thinking you can try to improve your grammar (especially commas) because there were many comma fixes. Perhaps using an online proofreading service or asking someone you trust to proofread will help fix this. Anyways, great work and good luck on future chapters. Edits: Topic locked on owner's request.

Okay, thanks for the confirmation. Please make sure to post the original lyrics and song in your contest entry by editing your post so that your entry may be considered.

Yea, I used a chromebook once for showing off my equipment playing a few rounds of MM for fun in school, and the browser would lag and crash after one or two matches. It was also one of the newer and more powerful models, so I'm thinking in general, a new computer would help with this problem. If that isn't something you can do, perhaps you can try 1. downloading a new browser (that supports flash) using instructions here and then 2. enjoying Tanki Online Flash using this link (flash version does not lag as much as html5 which I know from past experience). Note: If your chromebook is not evil like mine you can skip step 1 and just go straight to step 2. Happy playing!

A streamer has many places to livestream, unless, of course, they happen to be party decorations. How do you feel when you know you're not invited to someone's birthday party?

Is this a parody of a song? Just checking to make sure. I'm fine with multiple entries, but only the most recent one will be considered while judging.

just saying the Bible says that that day will not be known to man...

Approved. Great work, I enjoyed the experiences that it brought back. Making a Tanki friend is quite an awesome experience. I really liked the emotion in the story, but I'm thinking you can work on fixing grammar and spelling mistakes, especially commas (using Grammarly can help with basic checks, while a proofreader can work with more detailed errors the computer algorithms cannot catch). Other than that, I can't wait for the next few stories! Edits:

Great question! I didn't really think of two people working on this contest, but yes, if more players collaborate and make a song, then the prize will be shared between all the players. I'll add it in the rules.

Correct, there was one a while back... in fact it was one of the first few I've read. I made sure to use other ideas that Gnatty didn't use, don't want to copycat or get the newspaper banhammer (hence why there was no talk about eSports or clans). Thanks for the feedback, though!

Wondering about life is a great way to pass time. When is a good time to stop and think about anything?

Not sure if that's a question, but that makes me job easier. Thanks! Ever wonder if the world is fair?

@classic-style-hiphop Heyo, I have some feedback for you after a few good hours of procrastination and curing minor sadness. I hope it will be helpful. ? I feel like your sentence structure is pretty good and descriptive, and I guess all I really have to say is maybe add a few more descriptions in the sentence. However, I'm thinking you can switch up the sentence starts because I see a few chunks of sentences starting with "you". Maybe try to vary it once in a while? I also think that the dialogue can be improved as it feels ping-pong, back and forth. Perhaps add some descriptions in the middle or replace the dialogue. For example, replacing 'yes' wth a nodding of the head would cut the dialogue wall with a description, which helps further set the scene. Might add more if I have more time to analyze it deeper, I'll keep you posted. Hopefully, you'll be able to implement some changes to get you to that Hippin_in_Hawaii level ?

You're welcome! Second person is kind of new to me too (after being banned from using second person in classes I haven't had much experience), so I'm also trying to get the hang of it. We're in the same boat for this one mate. About constructive criticism, I'll be getting that done tomorrow, I'll update it in just a moment. (a little lazy rn hehe)

Approved. When you wrote that you were going to extend your first story, I was already excited, but when I read it, I was blown away. Great work, keep it up in future pieces. By the way, the second person POV is still quite new to me, so it'll take some time to get adjusted to that, but I think it really fits your story. Edits:

Sit down, shut up, keep your head down, and the world will start to revolve around you.

Story writing is a very unique task that takes years to master. How many stories does it take for a writer to improve?

Nah, I think it's fine, but if you would like, you can make a rework on the topic. I kinda relate to you, because when I look back, it can get a little hard for me to get through without dying of cringe lol.