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  1. Guys Mosquito or Tornado? This account is purely BP (only used firebird and hornet for halloween) and i have Wasp M2 and Railgun M1. I was thinking of buying tornado purely because it unlocks sooner and I would get Railgun M2 quicker. 

  2. Article approved.

     

    Wow. Firstly, compared to part 1, this is a huge improvement. Everything that needed improving in that piece has been perfected in this. I love the style, great flow, all of it.

     

    Rarely does a story actually get me on the edge of my seat wanting to read more, but this did, and in few words as well. Absolutely can't wait for Part 3!

     

    Also, very accurate, I had to make very few changes - far fewer than the last piece.

     

    Edits:

    • A couple of words changed to improve flow, very little in total

     

    I agree with kais - great story, way better than last time!

    thank you both! im glad that im improving

  3. I stood, horrified at what the voice just said. Then a huge crash came out of nowhere; I ducked and pulled Ethan down as a huge piece of stone flew past at what must had been sixty miles per hour, right where our faces were a second ago. We got up to our feet and ran like we never ran before. No matter where we ran, we always seemed to run right in front of the danger. It was a while before I realized the ground around us for about ten feet was illuminated. 

     

    We're in a spotlight, I thought darkly, the spotlight on a horrific show, and we're the main event.

     

    We would run in a certain direction, just to see a wall of spikes coming straight at us. We would run the opposite way to see a huge tower falling, threatening to crush us. Eventually we got to the point of almost collapsing. Gasping for breath, I looked at Ethan. He looked like he was about to puke. Actually, it seemed like he had already puked multiple times. He was so pale that he looked like something from a black and white movie. We caught each others eye, and we nodded. We had to keep moving.

     

    We started sprinting again, nowhere in particular. Eventually I noticed that the attacks were getting more frequent and also more dangerous. Twice we had to jump holes up to 15 feet wide, praying we would make it. I was running for about 15 minutes before I realized something was wrong. I looked around.

     

    Where was Ethan?.

     

    I instantly turned and ran the way I just came from. I ran for who knows how long. Then I heard something that made my heart stop for a good 5 seconds.

     

    A scream, very far away.

     

    But I knew exactly who it was.

     

    I bolted towards the noise, jumping across huge holes and running under bridges as they collapsed. I kept on running as Ethan kept on screaming in the distance, not getting louder but yet not getting softer. I ran faster and faster until I tripped over something.

     

    I got up, not wanting to find out what it was but curious at the same time. Any blood that was still in my face instantly disappeared. It was Ethan, lying on his stomach. I bent down to roll him over to see if he's hurt. There, on his chest, was a note.

     

    Loyalty can mean many things. I didn't know letting them die was one of them.

     

    I looked at the body. It was plastic.

     

    It's a fake.

     

    I realized too late it was a trap. I saw a huge explosion, a huge mass of rock, and nothing more. 

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    holllly ok ur smart 

     

     

    What way really is down? I mean like if i was at the north pole and my friend was on the direct opposite side of the world from me, wouldnt my down be his up and his down be my up? and say somebody was inbetween us, would that make their left/right our up/down? which way is the right way down?

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