Story [Issue 25] Rising of an Underdog

[RicoGod 1,832]

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[Piety 70]

Now that's what I call a text wall.

[aom112 20]

Nice story.. ^_^

[donut70 97]

May I suggest adding differently colored headers for each scene change. if you plan to write stories in chunks this large then anything which makes it look less like just a wall of text is better. Great story btw, but I think you need to get an editor for a few grammatical mistakes.

[7919zola 252]

Beautifully written, from the first word in the first paragraph to the last word in the last paragraph, it kept me attentive and delighted. I'll make sure I upvote your article first thing tomorrow. ;)

 

EDIT: Hope you will make a sequel, with as many details and bits of dialogue as you did with this one. :) (I'm a sucker for details and complexity :D)

Edited August 14, 2014 by 7919zola

[ALEKSEJ0077 150]

Great story although I didn't finish reading cause got to rank.

[canadarules 1,938]

Fen is revolutionizing the forum newspaper writers into story tellers...good work fen

[Eragon 13,876]

So you haven't read Harry Potter, The Hunger Games or anything like that then?

All of them are interesting. As movies. But reading can get boring, especially with harry potter.. Which has like 9 books each 5000 pages  :wacko: (sarcasm)  :P  :P

[Lhamster 4,081]

As films? Just no. The films are awful compared to the books, and a good book will suck you in and you just keep reading it. The only time the films aren't worse than the books is LOTR. This story is about the same length as a chapter of Harry Potter.

[thenewgamer_the_dark 20]

Damn big story. Will read some other day :P

+1

[Warhammer_TO 181]

^^ :)

As films? Just no. The films are awful compared to the books, and a good book will suck you in and you just keep reading it. The only time the films aren't worse than the books is LOTR. This story is about the same length as a chapter of Harry Potter.

very true... Edited August 18, 2014 by Warhammer_TO

[chebaka 0]

Havent fineshed but looks good  :fire_r: :fire_l:

[getreadytodie 20]

I like this story :) I am splitting it into 2 tho because im to tired to continue right now and will read tommoz :D

[EatYourMeat 27]

Lol I finally read it. Its.. Umm... Good but I would suggest Selena's opinion. It took me 30 mins to read that!

[r_gamewizard0 18]

After the "il help u rebuild dads tank" i stoped reading.Oh and let me guess HAPPY ENDING, FIN... and i do fell sad :) NOT

[Superlative 500]

Fen is revolutionizing the forum newspaper writers into story tellers...good work fen

What happened to Archy? What happened to the base the mirror? Ooh poor Archy is forgotten. :P Good job, Fen.

[akashrox_re-born 281]

How much months did u take to write this? 

[Music_Cat 16]

Great story...almost book quality, with a few changes/adjustments.

[Ranger_Will 3]

This is just awesome, Fen

[Superlative 500]

How much months did u take to write this? 

Dude, don't be funny, it kills us. (Rofl). Literary. .

[r_TIGER_BOY_20140 78]

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