[Story] Intergalactic Wars [Part 1] [UN]

[CombatCat2 248]

[story] Intergalactic Wars [Part 1]:

 

 

“Did you bring what I asked?” A gruff voice came out of the darkness of the other side of the room. There was one dim light in it, and it was next the the entrance, flickering regularly.

 

“Yes. It is in our ship,” said the man standing in the doorway. “We have men unloading it now. Then we will bring it inside.”

 

“Good. Go unload it, and leave at once.”

 

“Yes, sir.” The man turned around and stepped into the hallway. He turned right, and, stepping out of the airlock leading outside, saw four men lying dead next to his ship. There was a large crate next to them. He turned around to see a large, muscular guard coming toward him.

 

“You know too much.” The guard said. There was a gunshot, and immediately the door to a large hangar was opened, and the ship was rolled inside. Then the door shut, and the last of the evidence was hidden.

 

 

_{* * * * *}

 

 

It was a standard convoy. One starship, two cruisers, and a cargo ship, all flying in the classic diamond pattern. The starship, a large craft with many weapons and a powerful shield, was at the lead. The starship also held the leader of the convoy: Alan Thompson. A strong man in his mid twenties, Alan was one of the highest ranking members of ILE, the Intergalactic Law Enforcement. Although he wasn’t aware of what he was transporting in the convoy, Alan had known it was important since he was told to never take his eyes off of the cargo ship, yet somehow he found himself looking into deep space at the moment. 

 

Suddenly a voice was heard on the intercom: “Gentlemen, we are preparing to enter Sector C. We need all units on watch.” Sector C. The most dangerous sector of the four. C was where all the major criminals were, including the most feared known space-terrorist group: GST (Galactic Space Terrorists). GST was always lurking, waiting to do something. They had committed crimes such as raiding convoys, killing innocent pedestrians, and assaulting ILE officers. And Sector C was their home. Alan knew that they would most likely try something, but what? He was about to find out.

 

Moments later, voice came over the radio: “Prepare for battle; we’re under attack.”

 

 

To be continued...

 

~@CombatCat2

[PetertheGeniusGamer 74]

This is not a short story, and I rate this 8.5/10. Nice job!

[CombatCat2 248]

This is not a short story, and I rate this 8.5/10. Nice job!

It's not? Then the rest of it will be really long.

Thanks!

[stuartb 234]

Keep up the good work

[drazeruzumaki 5,021]

good story im waiting for the next part ;)

[Darren4Turbo 4,913]

Good Job  ^_^

[CombatCat2 248]

Keep up the good work

good story im waiting for the next part ;)

Good Job  ^_^

Thanks guys :lol:

Feedback/suggestions are appreciated.

[Ochai_back 61]

Wow you have a talent for writing,

nice

[DarkShadow916 304]

Nice job Cat :)

[T.O.T.A.L.W.A.R 581]

First +1.

 

 

I feel the like the plot is moving too fast which makes it a little bit hard to enjoy, you killed a guy already at the

8th line :o .  

 

Some descriptions of how the characters look like , what they are wearing and the types of guns they are using

Would be great ... an estimation of the firepower of the space armada and there location in space

would be nice.

 

A deeper description of the characters emotions during the story would also be nice.

 

 

Looking forward for part 2  :D .

Edited June 2, 2015 by T.O.T.A.L.W.A.R

[BlitzPanzer12345 241]

i think itz somewhat copied from Star Wars : Republic Commandos

but still , gud story

[CombatCat2 248]

Wow you have a talent for writing,

nice

Nice job Cat :)

Thanks guys.

 

First +1.

 

 

I feel the like the plot is moving too fast which makes it a little bit hard to enjoy, you killed a guy already at the

8th line :o .  

 

Some descriptions of how the characters look like , what they are wearing and the types of guns they are using

Would be great ... an estimation of the firepower of the space armada and there location in space

would be nice.

 

A deeper description of the characters emotions during the story would also be nice.

 

 

Looking forward for part 2  :D .

You might find that the next part is a bit slower. 

There will be a few more descriptions coming. The first part was meant to be more fuzzy, as it plays a part later in the story, so I didn't describe anything in it.

Emotions? Eewwww. Kidding, we'll see.

 

i think itz somewhat copied from Star Wars : Republic Commandos

but still , gud story

I haven't read that; any copying wasn't intentional. Hopefully the next parts will separate more from the story you have mentioned.

[T.O.T.A.L.W.A.R 581]

 

Emotions? Eewwww. Kidding, we'll see.

Emotions not emoji  :)

[BlitzPanzer12345 241]

I haven't read that; any copying wasn't intentional. Hopefully the next parts will separate more from the story you have mentioned.

read ?

:P

itz a game

[CombatCat2 248]

Emotions not emoji  :)

I know.

 

 

read ?

:P

itz a game

:blink:  

I just assumed that because you compared it to writing that it was writing itself...

[CombatCat2 248]

Story discontinued as part of UN. If anyone wishes to read the rest, PM me.