The Bandit

[Darren4Turbo 4,913]

I was the last one off the bus. I lived 10 km further out of town than anybody else at school. I walked the 200m to home slowly, dead on my feet as usual. I knocked on the door. Mother opened the door, and I saw the sorrow flooding from her eyes. She hugged me at the end.

I asked her why she was crying. She turned and looked towards my sister’s room. It took nothing more than a second for me to realize that something bad has happened to my sister.

Bracing myself for what I would see, I opened the door. The destruction was like a piece of art sent from Satan. Shelves were smashed over the floor and it was as if a tornado had passed through. I saw her lying on the ground with blood pooled around her body. I stumbled out of the room, slamming the door before letting my body collapse against it in shock.

“What happened to her?” I gasped.

“Someone wearing a mask entered the house and told me to give him cash or he’d leave my daughter dead.”

My mother was shaking and her words were broken. I was surprised that she could even stand. She took a deep breath and then continued.

“I refused, and that was my mistake. He killed Emily and then he ran away.”

In silence, I looked at the room for a moment. What was there to say? I had no words to describe how I was feeling. Only screams, tears, actions. All I wanted now was to find that bandit and slit his throat. Anger coursed through me and forced my actions.

I asked my mother where the bandit had gone. She told me that he went towards a small house a few kilometres away from here. I got out a map and she showed it to me.

I decided to go to the bandit’s house. So I lied to my mother. I told her that I would go outside for a walk. I went around to the shed in the back where my father kept his guns, and unlocked the case. I made sure that the magazines were full, before I headed off to get my revenge.

 

I walked along the road, with anger driving me on. I quickly stopped dead, and walked back. It was like I was hypnotized by some person, and I put my weapons back. Then I returned to the road, realizing it was for my own good. I still kept walking, though, but then was stopped by a car coming towards me. It halted just before it passed me, and driving the car was a rather strange and a professional-looking girl.

 

My sister. Alive? Was she the bandit, after all? I thought.

 

I noticed a sword on the seat next to her. Why would anyone place a weapon like that? That’s totally a stupid move, and a one-way ticket to prison!

 

The girl - my sister - walked out with the sword. Placed it beside my throat...

 

“Didn’t expect that, eh? But no. That’s just a scare tactic. The real bandit is still out there. Where? Look at your family, John. I mean, ours.”

 

She took the sword down, and showed a picture. I was left by shock.

“So our father, is a criminal? He’s merely an impostor of our real father! And not only our bandit, but a terrorist. Where do you think he is now?” I asked.

 

“Where else he could be? We need to get to the airport, because I think he’s about to flee!” Emily told. We hurried in her car, and meanwhile, I asked.

 

“Who’s the dead person in the house, then? Perhaps a puppet?”

 

“Yep, that is a puppet. A good distraction to our target,” she laughed.

 

We reached the airport in time. We strode in, we saw hundreds of people walking in the airport, so it was hard to find our “father”. We searched for him everywhere.

 

I decided to search in the terminal, and then I noticed our “father” just about to start boarding a plane. We ran after him, and then pulled his disguise off. He put his knife on my hand, and I screamed. Nonetheless, the police quickly arrested him, and thanked us.

 

So basically, our father is a criminal! I thought with tears coming from my eyes. “Unfortunately, yes”, Emily said.

 

After a while, a doctor came and put bandages on my hand. He said that I needed to stay at home, and take a break from school for some time. My sister joined me and then, we went back home to explain what had happened to our mother, and to tell her why her husband would not be coming back home.

 

 

[Hex 11,520]

Ooooh  :o

 

+1

[Quarks 2,255]

quite a twist there.

[Penguin40 1,714]

Darren nug doesnt credit me for the twist - the entire story from "I walked along..." :(

 

But anyways, nice job Darren - the part you did plus the editing :)

[tweezers 1,034]

++++++++ :D

[Justsomeonelol 148]

good story :)

[donaldo9000 1,342]

Good story. Maybe a sequel? Maybe he breaks out of prison or so?  :ph34r:

Edited July 4, 2016 by donaldo9000

[Penguin40 1,714]

Good story. Maybe a sequel? Maybe he breaks out of prison or so?  :ph34r:

That'd be a good part... Let's see whether Darren agrees.

[KillerGnat 3,135]

Sequel plz. Nuf said.

[Penguin40 1,714]

Sequel plz. Nuf said.

All right, I hope I and Darren can work out some agreement on that. :D 

[Drey 879]

I'm looking to get into the Amateur Writing Business. Thanks for showing me what not to do xD

 

I'm joking. Amazing story.

 

[Penguin40 1,714]

Good story Turbo ;)

You should make a 2nd part, what happened to the house btw

I've said twice before, same topic, that there will be a sequel. If you're curious about why I'm replying rather than Darren, I wrote this article too.

[I.WalkAlone 548]

A lot of loopholes in there. Protagonist gets his mother to mark the bandit's house on a map and immediately leaves the house. And yet, the mother believes him when he says he is going out for a walk. The puppet part doesn't make any sense. And the duo could've simply called the police instead of physically going to the airport, which would've been quicker. Also, I'm pretty sure you can't enter an airport terminal without a ticket. At least, that's the way it works where I live.

[Darren4Turbo 4,913]

That's bad the topic doesn't credit you :(

Evil Darren won't credit anyone... BWAHAHAHA!!!  :ph34r:

[Penguin40 1,714]

A lot of loopholes in there. Protagonist gets his mother to mark the bandit's house on a map and immediately leaves the house. And yet, the mother believes him when he says he is going out for a walk. The puppet part doesn't make any sense. And the duo could've simply called the police instead of physically going to the airport, which would've been quicker. Also, I'm pretty sure you can't enter an airport terminal without a ticket. At least, that's the way it works where I live.

Darren's nugness at point 1 -_- Puppet part - that meant a dummy, or even a robot looking like an actual dead woman. And point 3 - NO. That's exactly the fun part - dealing with 'em personally. As for the last part, I honestly don't know it, never been in an airport terminal.

[Darren4Turbo 4,913]

Darren's nugness at point 1 -_-

#BlameDarren.

[Penguin40 1,714]

#BlameDarren.

No, only blame Miss Sarah aka the Night Sisters.

[Darren4Turbo 4,913]

No, only blame Miss Sarah aka the Night Sisters.

Some of AWC members agreed to blame me, and Bigy was one of them  :lol:

 

 

 

[Quarks 2,255]

Some of AWC members agreed to blame me, and Bigy was one of them  :lol:

 

 

 

yes, it is always your fault

[mydoom.exe 5,154]

Interesting story, though I must admit it's kind of disturbing how nobody seems bothered by the "puppet" getting murdered, especially since she is supposedly around the same age as Emily.

[Penguin40 1,714]

Interesting story, though I must admit it's kind of disturbing how nobody seems bothered by the "puppet" getting murdered, especially since she is supposedly around the same age as Emily.

Puppet getting murdered? Check my reply to I.WalkAlone.

[mydoom.exe 5,154]

Puppet getting murdered? Check my reply to I.WalkAlone.

Oh, I surmised that the puppet in the story was an actual person.

 

Thanks for clarification.