Tanki: Red vs Blue

[r_BloodWolf1 17]

Red vs Blue

 

Paradox looked across the battlefield, every five seconds a tank was destroyed, not by his army, but by Him. Of the 100 tank enemy army only one tank remained. Paradox laughed for the tank was only a recruit, it would be an easy kill. Once the tank was dead, he would rank up. In an instant, he was behind the tank. His Twins turret began to attack yet the tank would not die. The turret which had obliterated entire hordes of tanks could not eliminate this one tank. Then, before he could react the turret twisted and he was thrown across the battlefield. Filled with rage, he called on his 1000 tank army to dispatch the tank. Till now Paradox had only seen the destructive power of the turret. Now he saw its speed.

 

The ground rumbled and cracked as that tank went from the very center of the army to the other end of the battle field. Half of Paradox's army had been rendered ineffective as they lay upside down, their only option to self destruct. If he was mad before, now he was infuriated. The fuel that ran through his veins boiled. He was Paradox, the lord of tanks. But each time he came to the tank, he was blown back. Till now only Paradox's Devil's protection had saved him but then it all came to an end as the tank showed his supremacy. His rank had increased to the highest in the game, one thought to be impossible to achieve, there was only one person with that rank, the rank of God-King. A person who could enter any battle, who could change the rank that was being shown. He had never been a recruit, it was Axiom.

 

If Paradox was red, Axiom was blue.Paradox's arch-enemy, the one tank who even Paradox feared.Axiom attacked and decimated the army, almost killing five tanks with each hit. Come, Attack, and Conquer, words told to every tank when they joined the war, Axiom had taken those words beyond any other. When he came to me, Paradox used all his power but even the most powerful tanks eventually meet Death and Axiom was Death. A single hit and he started to fade into the dark abyss. His health was fading, there was no hope. Yet no one truly accepts death even when they lay dying, a part of you wants to live. Axiom turned, leaving Paradox to die but at that moment he made a fatal mistake. The tank that was dying was Paradox, not a normal tank and the Twins that had begun to lose power fired one last time and Axiom was the one thrown in the air this time and the air is where the God-King met is end.

 

Darkness began to set for Paradox. His last sight was of the scattered remains of his enemy. Maybe to others that would have been sorry sight but to a conqueror like Paradox, no sight was more pleasing. No sight.

Edited January 25, 2018 by r_BloodWolf1

[tweezers 1,034]

Approved. 

 

-Minor grammar edits and spacing. 

 

IMO, the last couple of sentences degraded the writing. They were unnecessary, and ruined the effect of the story. 

[GrandExecutioner 1,403]

Good effort but the last paragraph seemed like it was almost cut and paste into the story.

 

A bit more detail on some areas might be needed as you had a decent plot going.

Edited January 22, 2018 by GrandExecutioner

[govenier 1,202]

yes the last bit of the text was kinds unessasary

[r_BloodWolf1 17]

True, not my best piece of work.

[Commander_Rose 327]

True, not my best piece of work.

Enough with the suspense, post your best work and enter the mult team.

[r_BloodWolf1 17]

Enough with the suspense, post your best work and enter the mult team.

Might take a few more days(evil laugh).

[Commander_Rose 327]

Might take a few more days(evil laugh).

:lol: