Thoughts (A Poem)

[Cyber2_O.o 64]

Who are we anyway?

People see us on the outside,

But really, are we just that?

What about our feelings, and who we are on the inside?

 

That has to be a factor in it...

But it seems like others don't care,

They judge us how they want to,

And finding someone who does is rare.

 

Why does everyone think they know me,

When they hardly even know how I feel?

"Oh, you're just typical,"

Even if it's not real?

 

People may ignore our thoughts,

But the ones who do...

Those are our true friends,

That nothing can undo.

 

But really, are people truly different?

Or are we different only in an insignificant way?

Or are our thoughts the deciding factor,

Even if it seems so far away?

 

If they are really that important,

Then why do people seem to ignore them all the time?

Why don't they listen to their inner voice for once?

Then they'll probably reach their prime.

 

Why can't anyone look farther than what they can see?

Farther than what meets the eye,

And farther into our feelings;

Into things that most people look by.

 

It's a common mistake to just focus on the surface,

But the surface is only a mask,

If only people would put the mask down,

And just have the courage to ask.

 

Thoughts- ignored by people,

If only, if only,

People would look deeper,

And see that there are people who are lonely.

 

We aren't always what meets the eye,

And you should put that aside,

Until you see,

What's really going on inside.

 

Author's Note: Thanks to camppingguy (or MasterPat) and Wind (no, not the Tanki account one, another one) for inspiration.

Edited June 26, 2019 by Cyber2_O.o

[kaisdf 3,320]

Article approved.

 

Great poem, absolutely love it! A really nice piece about not judging people by their surface emotions and the value of truly getting to know someone.

 

Edits:

• Changed a couple words to avoid repetition
• Small grammar changes

[r_Given6 859]

Wonderful!

[Person_Random 4,991]

Great first work!  I absolutely loved it, however, you could have chosen to work harder to make the points less superficial.  You were more 'telling' and not 'showing' your point.  I'd suggest using a metaphor to compare this to.  Anyways though, it was a great topic with an even better message.

[Hippin_in_Hawaii 639]

What a lovely way to express yourself!

[Cyber2_O.o 64]

Thanks everyone!  :)  :)

Person_Random, thanks for the tip! To be honest, it was more of an impulsive poem without any real planning by me.  ^_^

[Lose 881]

Great job :D

[Person_Random 4,991]

Thanks everyone!  :)  :)

Person_Random, thanks for the tip! To be honest, it was more of an impulsive poem without any real planning by me.  ^_^

You're welcome!  (Me has impulses too, so I learned some from experience)  Don't sweat it, it was already pretty great (Most impulses are).  I feel like it could have just been expressed better.  Looking forward to your next piece!

[ILiveOnTheChatBox123 936]

Great Poem-I enjoyed it. This is the first poem (I think) since my last one-and its nice to see some poetry going around-especially such a great piece!

[ILiveOnTheChatBox123 936]

Quite thoughtful (pun) too!

(I don't know why this didn't merge)

Edited June 26, 2019 by ILiveOnTheChatBox123

[Person_Random 4,991]

Great Poem-I enjoyed it. This is the first poem (I think) since my last one-and its nice to see some poetry going around-especially such a great piece!

 

Quite thoughtful (pun) too!

(I don't know why this didn't merge)

Random thing I inherited from a friend: please don't try to double post!  (The edit tool will do)

[ILiveOnTheChatBox123 936]

No-usually if you post soon afterwards it just gets merged. Now that I posted it-and I saw it didn't merge, I just posted that it was accidental. Sorry.

[Cyber2_O.o 64]

But you can hide comments, can't you? Edit the first comment to contain both, and hide the second one.

Anyway, my second work is being moderated (it's a short story!).

 

Question: Can I friend you on Tanki?

Edited June 26, 2019 by Cyber2_O.o

[Person_Random 4,991]

No-usually if you post soon afterwards it just gets merged. Now that I posted it-and I saw it didn't merge, I just posted that it was accidental. Sorry.

Nah it's fine, just giving a friendly reminder  :)  

[girl_from_kurdistanX 383]

If only, if only,

People would look deeper,

And see that there are people who are lonely.

 

We aren't always what meets the eye,

And you should put that aside,

Until you see,

What's really going on inside.

brilliant 

[Jade 1,420]

I love the emotion and thought put into this, amazing work :)

[Sacrifice 2,278]

It's beautiful! :)