Fragile Knife: Raking Recruits (Part 2)

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Fragile Knife: Raking Recruits

 

 

 

 

 

The young men and women gathered in the field. There was a stage on the northern boundary of it. Many of them arranged in groups. One such group was Ryland Adams, Shane Yaw and Garret Watts. All three were somewhat optimistic men seeking to join the military, to aid humanity in obtaining victory.

 

Another was Sean Nerd, Mark Wellberg and Felix Antoine, they joined the military for the same reason as most. A social status was the reason most soldiers volunteered to join the military. Although none of them had any guts when it came to actually fighting the enemy.

 

And lastly, there was Leonardo Alfred, Andrew Parthon and Jean Carton. They had been friends for most of their lives. They were practically brothers to each other. Each willing to die for each other. The sounds of various conversations were silenced by a loud command of a soldier on the stage to form into positions.

 

They did as they were told. A balding, but strongly built man in his early 50s entered the stage and with a serious look on his face started his speech for the soon to be soldiers. He's been giving the same speech to soldiers for every year for a decade. Who knows how many of those soldiers that have listened to those speeches are still alive.

 

"Now listen and listen well, you useless studs. My name is Davin Rogers, You will refer to me as instructor Rogers. My job here is to shape you useless piles of trash into conditioned soldiers who won't soil themselves against an enemy the instant they spot it."

 

He screamed at the top of his lungs. Many soldiers feared the instructor and they're future having to be excellent in every field in order to not get kicked in the groin by him. However a handful of soldiers were calm as can be. They had already been through this, And even if they had not experienced it that way, they soon would.

 

The instructor screamed on for a few more minutes. Every now and then droplets of spit came form his mouth and onto the clothes and faces of the first row of recruits. After their introduction to the trainee corps, each was being tested in their strengths and weaknesses. They were ordered to break bricks and face their fears. Aracnaphobes would not be tolerated, They'd have to hold a relatively large spider in their hand for an hour.

 

After that the newbies had to take rest in their log cabins a hundred meters from the training fields. The conversations being had earlier that day were not as loud. Many soldiers went through a small type of hell personalized for themselves. However it would only make them a better soldier when they offered their lives against the enemy.

 

Earlier mentioned groups of friends rested together in their joint rooms. "So..." Andrew tried to spark up conversation. "Why did you guys volunteer?"

 

"Well," Mark put his thick glasses back into place. "I think I've always been an exceptional soldier, Due to the high demand for troops, I knew the situation would only get worse later in time. I couldn't imagine my little brothers joining the military. So I took their place."

 

"Me and Felix have the same story." Sean said as he looked at Felix, who stared at the ceiling as he laid in bed. "We decided humanity needed soldiers, and we simply thought "Hey, that's right up our alley." Sean was an energetic lad with an interest in the military. His parents had died when he was younger during an unknown attack form the enemy in the eastern boundaries of humanity. Felix and Mark came from the same village. However Mark still kept his family intact while Felix's story was the same with his parents.

 

"Well, I'm sorry to hear about that." Jean apologized for asking about their family matters earlier. "Don't bother with that, so what stories do you all have?" Leo put down his coffee, "Well..." he muttered. "We're from Argon city... or we were from Argon city." That caught Felix and Sean's interest. Mark raised his head in shock. "So... your from that town?"

 

"Thats right."' Leonardo replied.

 

Argon City was once a prosperous city at the northeast border of human territory. "Well, best not start a conversation like that in the middle of the night. We'll talk about it tomorrow if you'd be comfortable with it." Sean told them, and everyone agreed. "Try not to remember it." Jean told Leo and Andy. But it was hard. No,, it was impossible. 

 

                            Flashback

Edited March 8, 2018 by Blackdrakon30

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- Sentence structure edits (mostly in the earlier part of the story)

- Fixed some spelling errors  

- Capitalized some lowercase names and "i"s.

- Few other assorted edits

 

Approved

 

I'd say the main thing to work on is writing style. It feels really stiff right now, and a bit forced. The sentences are very choppy. Other than that, interesting story as of right now. I sincerely apologize for the long delay in getting this approved; school-related activities have been taking up like 99% of my time right now.