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After all, tomorrow is another day

 

Follow-up piece inspired from Tomorrow, a story by [member=C.O.N.Q.U.E.R.O.R]

 

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His cue took me aback.

 

Is he attempting to trick me?

 

I can’t let him do so. I mustered the little of assurance left in me and mumbled again, half-hearted, the customary “Trick or treat?”

 

The old man dismissed my request and replied smirking: “Come back tomorrow,” before bolting the door shut.

 

I retreated to the sidewalk, puzzled and strolled to the abutted house with my empty bucket. An unnerving feeling enfolded me as I realised the lack of Halloween decorations over it, and I was damn sure it was the case minutes ago. A quick survey over the street confirmed that more buildings had similarly lost their Halloween spirited apparel. Before my brain could figure a reasonable explanation to this freakish observation, a flock of teens heeded me and hailed me down execrable jokes.

 

“Hey glutton, can’t wait for Halloween?”

 

“Nice costume fatso, but wrong day, dum-dum!”

 

Now totally confused with no candy, I ran home in a nerve-racking state and aimed for bed hoping to cross out this spooky evening with a resting and welcoming night. After all, tomorrow is another day. But an agitated mind and a hungry stomach made it an ordeal. I woke up in the late morning and quickly came to a realisation, it was a Halloween day, again, today.

 

The old man was right.

 

No, this was just a dream! Or more of a nightmare…

 

The temptation to visit the mysterious house was intense, but the fear of another eerie encounter was stronger. I resisted all day, but eventually convinced myself that nothing serious could happen in a broad daylight.  

 

Facing the house 16, it seemed far less daunting than expected, just an ordinary house, like all its sisters aligned around Grimmauld Place. I confidently approached the porch and rang the doorbell, which tinkled a cheerly melody. Light footsteps came crescendo from the vestibule to unlock the bolt and an old lady peep through the door opened ajar.

 

“Good afternoon” I started.

 

“Hello dear, what can I do for you?”

 

I was unprepared, so I had no backup story as I was expecting the old man. I improvised: “I am looking … for making money helping the neighbourhood… I can do a bit of gardening. I tried to talk to your husband yesterday.”

 

“My husband died a year ago, yesterday.”

 

“Oh, I’m sorry for your loss. However, I talked to an old man yesterday, I assumed he was your husband.”

 

“I am the sole person living in this house…”

 

TBC.

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Approved.

 

Edits:

- just few minor fixes related to grammar

 

 

I was curious how you will pick up on Conq's version which had quite humorous twist. I got to say it turned out very well. I see you opted for a rather spooky ending which works well too. Good job.

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I was curious how you will pick up on Conq's version which had quite humorous twist. I got to say it turned out very well. I see you opted for a rather spooky ending which works well too. Good job.

If it ain't spooky, it ain't Halloween-nee.

It is not the end but the start. 

TBC...

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Wonder if it'll be a yearly piece. y'know make one each Halloween and such.

1000 words per year? You better hope it is not a novel :D

I will try to get finish for Halloween. Let's aim for a short story with max 4000 words. 

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Haha. Well done, I'm curious to see how it'll be continued!

Me too :ph34r:

 

I don't want the plot to be like Groundhog day or the Edge of tomorrow, where the MC change his behaviour and act or improve skills to progress. The repetition of the loop would be boring to write over an over so I want to keep it a short story (<7.5k words). One idea is to have a race/game between different character, also trapped in the loop, and they would break the loop by solving enigmas, but that would require more than 7.5 k words.  Until find the final plot is set up, ...

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"My husband died a year ago, yesterday." :mellow:

It means yesterday it was his first death anniversary. But yesterday the boy also meet with him, so it seems. Time travelling can be scary at time  :(

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It means yesterday it was his first death anniversary. But yesterday the boy also meet with him, so it seems. Time travelling can be scary at time :(

What I meant was that it sounded a bit cheesy, like something that's forcibly inserted to arouse thrill/horror/suspense.

No kill pls

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What I meant was that it sounded a bit cheesy, like something that's forcibly inserted to arouse thrill/horror/suspense.

No kill pls

You said that in such a concise way it makes difficult for other to properly understand your comment.

Just a bit cheesy, then we are not watching an anime :D

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You said that in such a concise way it makes difficult for other to properly understand your comment.

Just a bit cheesy, then we are not watching an anime :D

I just added an emote. :mellow:

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Oh, a sequel? Must make a sequel of my old post, too.

 

Then, looking me in the eye, he said, "Can I help you?" 

 

My voice shaking, I attempted to yell, but all that came out was a confused, "Admin Gold Plz?"

 

The admin's eyes shone mirthfully. 

 

"Administrators don't drop gold boxes."

 

His cue took me aback.

 

Is he attempting to trick me?

 

I can’t let him do so. I mustered the little of assurance left in me and mumbled again, half-hearted, the customary “Admin Gold Plz?”

 

The Admin, sighed. "Fine."

 

Admin has dropped the Gold Box

 

I retreated to the battle and, sure enough, the sign was there on the ground. I sat on it, waiting.

 

Then I saw it... the meteorite.

 

BOOM!!!

Someone_Else has taken the Gold Box

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