The Halloween Story

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

I decided to right a story since Halloween is coming up this month. I am going to release a chapter every 2-3 days, and will finish it by the 31st. So without further ado:

 

The Halloween Story from Tanki Online

By micah7586

NOTE: All names and places may be subject to change. Also some roles in this story DO NOT reflect on the real tanki!!!

 

October 31, 2012:

Chapter 1:

Today started off as a pretty boring day. I went to the Tanki Academy, attended marshal arts with Master Wu, and went home with my friends supergirl, vilmos (or william), clone22 (not sure if she was cloned though), and suzon. We were known as the Wasp Gang. We were arch rivals with the Hornets, who were made up of by Reecer, Rocket, Skitee, and the dreaded.......... (gulp) RaR. Oh, I forgot, my name is micah, and I am a 13 year old kid who lives in Perm, with all my friends. So, today is halloween, and my friends and I are going to the Annual Carnival that the city holds. It sounds like fun too. Well, I will start as we were walking home from the academy. "Hey suzon, you going tonight to the carnival? I'm going." supergirl inquires. "of course, how bout you vil and micah?" he replies. "You bet" I said, "And I know that clone is coming". "Guess that we all are. The Wasps will own all the games, and I even hear they have a haunted house" vilmos says. We had been proceeding down Main Street which is always full of people and other kids. I was just about to state how fun it was, when i got pushed in the back and stumbled right into the others. "Micah!!!" they said. "Sorry, I got pushed...." I apoligized, leaving the accusation open. We turned, and saw reecer and rocket ambling down the street ahead of us. "Well, one mystery solved" I stated. "Now lets get home. Mammy will get worried if I stay out to long. We will meet by the church tonight at 5, and then go on together to the carnival" "Ok" everyone agreed. We went each our sperate ways, and as I headed home, I could not wait until we left tonight.

 

October 31, 3:12 pm

Chapter 2

 

Sitting in my room by myself, I finally got bored of playing video games, and decided to go on a walk. When I need to think, I always go for a walk to a certain spot. And I had been putting things off that I had to think about. I told mammy where I was going, and then headed out down the street. My house is right near the town center, and I always went down the street, out into the center, into the park, and ended by the lake. Today was no different. I forged ahead into the stream of people and started the thought process. I always had feelings about supergirl, but I recently found out that she was already with some other guy. It broke my heart, but I knew that love was wishing the best for others. I also thought about vilmos (william) and how he had been one of my best friends for a long time. There had been some rises and falls, but he had always come through for me, and I had tried to do the same. Life is a mystery, and I have always worked to unravel it. Without thinking, I found I had made it to the lake, and began to slowly walk around it. I remebered when I had asked supergirl, and she was truthful, when I had trusted vilmos with my secret, and he helped me. How all of my friends were kind, trustworthy, and truthful helped me through my life. (facepalm) sorry, I forgot to say. I have been adopted by my mammy, but before that, I had a secret life, one that I have only entrusted to vilmos. I told some of it to my friends, but the whole story is only known by me and vil. I noticed that it was getting late, and started to head back for the house, but decided to try going a different way today. I walked left instead of right, and then moved through the thickets, but suddenly stopped short. I could hear voices floating through the trees, and they were familier, odd. I snuck forward, carefull to not hit anything, and when I could see, what I saw took my breath away. Around a drawing on the ground stood skitee, reecer, rocket, and Rar. They were discussing something and knowing them, it was not good. "Almost time for the big bang at the carnival" skit said. "Yep, and will it bang" reecer agreed. "Ok guys, lets go over it one more time" RaR (Rock and Ride) commanded. "We all will go in at the opening time. Then at 5:30, we all will drift to the scare zone. where we will plant our suprises. Our mission is to ambush the Wasps, who our informer said are all going together to the carnival. Then, we will follow them through the zone until at the end, when they leave, we will get them once and for all" "But they use m3 rails" rocket protested. "They will knock us out in seconds" "Fool, we are the hornets, and railguns can't stop us. I use thunder, skit uses freeze, rocket uses shaft, and reecer uses ricochet. Everyone clear? Good, lets go" RaR finishes. As they leave, I start to slowly head back, going at about 2.60391 miles per hour. I make it to the lake, and then roar home. I arrive safely, but fear for our safety. Running up to my room, I grab my comlink. "Group call, wasps" I order. "Group call activated" the computer voice says. I hear the other people on the end start talking. "This better be important" suzon says. I quickly tell them all that I had heard. They are shocked at the lengths that the hornets would go to take us down. But we all hatch a plan to make it out, and on top. This carnival is just getting better and better.

 

Edited October 17, 2012 by Aero.v2.0

[SilentShadow 104]

You have made quite a good introduction to the story, I hope you put in some scary elements so that it truly relates to Halloween! ;)

[CooperO 7,956]

I like it, do you want to make a new post in this forum every time you post a new chapter, so this won't lower to the 2nd or even 3th page? ( I mean bumping it, if necessary)

[r_SuicideWarrior0 1]

I would like to make some suggestions to improve your story:

• It's good to start with some action or mystery as it immediately grabs the readers attention, and then go on to describe the settings, characters,etc
  
• Split it into paragraphs because right now, it looks like a block of text.
  
• Try to add an interesting event in every chapter.
  
• And, as SilentShadow stated, try to get to the main theme of the story (Halloween) soon.
  

Otherwise, its a good start and i'll be looking forward for further chapters. :)

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

I like it, do you want to make a new post in this forum every time you post a new chapter, so this won't lower to the 2nd or even 3th page? ( I mean bumping it, if necessary)

I would like to make some suggestions to improve your story:

• It's good to start with some action or mystery as it immediately grabs the readers attention, and then go on to describe the settings, characters,etc
  
• Split it into paragraphs because right now, it looks like a block of text.
  
• Try to add an interesting event in every chapter.
  
• And, as SilentShadow stated, try to get to the main theme of the story (Halloween) soon.
  

Otherwise, its a good start and i'll be looking forward for further chapters. :)

You have made quite a good introduction to the story, I hope you put in some scary elements so that it truly relates to Halloween! ;)

Thanks for the feedback, this is kinda a intro, but I will probably get to some action by thursday or friday. Also, I may make a new topic, but I will see ;)

[CooperO 7,956]

Also, I may make a new topic, but I will see ;)

No, don't make a new topic, edit your first post. Just bump this topic whenever you add a new chapter, so we know there is a new chapter.

[IC-Ironclad-IC 12]

doode, im a hornet ;) me and rocket, hornet bro's 43v3r xD

[IC-Ironclad-IC 12]

sorry my bad....

Edited October 17, 2012 by IC-Ironclad-IC

[Alklines 1,751]

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

thanks, ik

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

 

Congrats 1k messages

 

Btw chapter two released

[RockandRide 12]

Yay, Im featured in this story :P

 

EDIT: BTW i dont use thunder :D make me have freeze :P

Edited October 17, 2012 by RockandRide

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

Lol :-)

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

Um... I think I'll leave you as freeze ;)

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

note

 

chapter three release date is friday.

if you do not wish to be in this stroy, please tell me

[splitterpoint 10,986]

I love this, keep up the awesome job...

[CooperO 7,956]

I feel so lonely, I'm the only one following this topic..(the anonymous one doesn't count) :P

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

LOL i follow the topic :D

[CooperO 7,956]

So you're the anonymous one?

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

um.... tha depends on what you mean by that :P

Edited October 18, 2012 by Aero.v2.0

[CooperO 7,956]

I mean this:

[splitterpoint 10,986]

What does anonymous mean in this case?

EDIT: nevermind, got (positive) Ninja-posted. :ph34r:

Edited October 18, 2012 by splitterpoint

[CooperO 7,956]

Hey micah, where is chapter 3?

[Crusader 198]

Put me in it!

[The_Ice_Dragon 22]

cool story bro