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[DeadBolt 54]

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Edited September 21, 2014 by DeadBolt

[canadarules 1,938]

cool short story passage. written in first person view if i have learned anything at school. lol but still cool story hope you add some awesome pics here and rename topic like book and creativity because than u could have some cool pics here to go with your story to make it look cooler and easier to understand as many like to see pictures during stories

[SpreadLoveNotHate 374]

Looking good.

[TheLonelyEpic 212]

Are you in Kindergarten?

[canadarules 1,938]

Are you in Kindergarten?

when you say that who are you speaking to.

[DeadBolt 54]

cool short story passage. written in first person view if i have learned anything at school. lol but still cool story hope you add some awesome pics here and rename topic like book and creativity because than u could have some cool pics here to go with your story to make it look cooler and easier to understand as many like to see pictures during stories

Ha Ha ,i plan on making this into a series if i become a reporter their will be 5 more;about this length. i also made plans to add pic to go with this but really was trying to see what it would look like on the forum before i sent it.i  made this in like 30 min ,one hour before Friday 20th so i was in a rush .just wait till i have time to write something good ,poetry is my best!!

[DeadBolt 54]

Are you in Kindergarten?

lol 11th grade English 3 honors,just was in a rush.this is more of a test on how long it was gana look when i sent it in,was really hoping for at least 3 pages worth of stuff form "word".

throw me a topic and ill give you 3 pages worth of stuff about it 

Edited September 21, 2013 by DeadBolt

[canadarules 1,938]

lol 11th grade English 3 honors,just was in a rush.this is more of a test on how long it was gana look when i sent it in,was really hoping for at least 3 pages worth of stuff form "word".

throw me a topic and ill give you 3 pages worth of stuff about it 

Why do i have the feeling that you do 24 hours of analysis on information and 12 hours writing the thing since you said that lol. I usually am able to write 2 pages on word just off of ideas off the top of my head. I really hope you become a reporter though. Wish you best of luck in that. Just remember as bob the builder said "Can we do it " "YES WE CAN" Best  phrase ever in any show hands down

[Aero.v2.0 1,456]

Just remember as bob the builder said "Can we do it " "YES WE CAN" Best  phrase ever in any show hands down

:D

 

@OP I personally believe you have merit, however you really should take the time to carefully revise and proofread the articles before publishing them. You are mixing present and past tense together, and also confusing the spelling of some words (like "form" and "from"). The best strategy is to revise and proofread them one time, leave the paper, and then come back later and do it again. You will be more likely to catch mistakes if you come back to it later than if you do it all at once. I call it writer's perfection (means it looks perfect to you no matter how bad it is)  ;)

Edited September 22, 2013 by Aero.v2.0

[canadarules 1,938]

:D

yes i got a cool smiley face

[DeadBolt 54]

:D

 

@OP I personally believe you have merit, however you really should take the time to carefully revise and proofread the articles before publishing them. You are mixing present and past tense together, and also confusing the spelling of some words (like "form" and "from"). The best strategy is to revise and proofread them one time, leave the paper, and then come back later and do it again. You will be more likely to catch mistakes if you come back to it later than if you do it all at once. I call it writer's perfection (means it looks perfect to you no matter how bad it is)  ;)

I know ,but i was in a major rush!!

really wish i had more time and didn't slack off on this project.(quote)"from and form" are more then likely the biggest mistake i made and always do poorly at.

[DeadBolt 54]

Why do i have the feeling that you do 24 hours of analysis on information and 12 hours writing the thing since you said that lol. I usually am able to write 2 pages on word just off of ideas off the top of my head. I really hope you become a reporter though. Wish you best of luck in that. Just remember as bob the builder said "Can we do it " "YES WE CAN" Best  phrase ever in any show hands down

No,i don't do all that . i come up with the weirdest must unbelievable things at nights and on the oddest days too.i mostly just go with the flow;kinda like Captain Jack Sparrow ha ha.

[DeadBolt 54]

funny joke about bob the builder .

you mammoth so fat; he make Bob the builder "say no we can't".

[meronnatu 151]

lol ^ ;)

[gromatom 625]

text color eye strain
difficult to read

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-.-   hmmmm...   the blue is hard to read