Story [Issue 16] Part 4: Conclusion

[SpreadLoveNotHate 374]

Part 4: Conclusion

If you expected one of my stories, this is not what you're looking for. It's newer, better, and more aojsd!

 

The finale to Goldrock's 4 part Story Series, written by @aojsd

First, Second, and Third parts by Goldrock. 

 

            Generalissimo Fyodor was in many ways, the perfect tankman, he was smart, skilled, determined, and wise. When he was but a mere recruit, he was constantly insulted, put down, and bullied by tankmen of higher ranks. This did not deter him, however, from achieving his greatest dream, to become Generalissimo of the army. He was an example for all, his skill impeccable. But deep down inside of him, he knew he had a weakness, one that would inevitably lead to his downfall.

           

            His honor.

 

            Generalissimo Fyodor was too honorable, he could never forgive himself for the deaths of soldiers that he could’ve saved, and when he and his remaining soldiers entered the center of sector 23 seeing Lyonid caught between two Mammoths, he knew that he could never live with himself if this soldier died when he could’ve tried to stop it.

 

Center, Sector 23, At the arrival of Fyodor and his remaining troops.

 

            “Surrender now,” Fyodor yelled, “You are out numbered!”

 

            The enemy leader laughed, “Ah, but you wield Thunders, and cannot attack us without killing your own soldier. I know you are noble Fyodor, you would never attempt it.”

 

            “Don’t li-“Lyonid exclaimed before he was stopped when he was rammed in the side, disabling his radio.

 

            “Attack and he dies,” The leader threatened, “Unless you surrender.”

 

            Fyodor found himself in a moral dilemma, whether to shoot, end the war and retire peacefully, or surrender to save Lyonid while most likely dying. He knew that Lyonid was telling him to shoot, but he also knew that he live peacefully after the deaths he had witnessed. He took a deep breath, said the two words that could seal his fate.

 

            “I surrender.”

 

            The enemy leader had a smug smile on his face as the Lyonid was released and Fyodor allowed himself to be restrained. Then, the two words he had expected all along arrived.

 

            “Kill him.”

 

            Lyonid watched horrified as the guards shot at Fyodor, hearing loud bangs followed by three explosions, and a loud battle cry coming from the remaining troops before falling unconscious.

 

Repair Hospital, Magistral, After the assault on Sector 23

 

            Lyonid awoke in a hospital in Magistral seeing the Fyodor’s commander standing beside him. At first he was confused, but when he remembered what had happened a wave of grief smashed into him.

           

            “Generalissimo Fyodor, is he-“

 

            “No.” Said the commander.

 

            The grief inside Lyonid multiplied. If tanks could cry, he’d be bawling his eyes out.

 

            “What happened?” Lyonid asked.

 

            Apparently Fyodor had predicted he would die, so right before the enemies shot him, he shot, doing damage while self-destructing, causing the guards to shoot his destroyed tank and self-destruct as well. Fyodor’s troops then killed the rest of the enemies quickly, before returning to Magistral. The commander had come to notify Lyonid that he had been promoted to Marshal. Their newest job would be revealed later, but for now, everyone was mourning over Fyodor’s death in the costliest war in tank history.

 

~ aojsd

 

aojsd is one of the new Candidate Reporters joining us! Give him a warm welcome. The original series was created by Goldrock. 

[aojsd 144]

First hehe

[ExtremeKiller26 443]

Nice.. :D And grats on the new job!

[aojsd 144]

Thanks :D

[Atakhan 1,229]

Congrats and nice job

[VectorSierra 199]

Congrats and an excellent job on the article! ;) I will expect more from you in the future! 

Edited October 5, 2013 by VectorSierra

[GoldRock 6,165]

Congrats, and nice ending; though this isn't the way I'd have finished the series, what with my subtle refernces to Factory and Future and the felling of escalating tension in the third part, it's well-written. Nice work ;)

[q456wert 18]

Well done

[aojsd 144]

Congrats, and nice ending; though this isn't the way I'd have finished the series, what with my subtle refernces to Factory and Future and the felling of escalating tension in the third part, it's well-written. Nice work ;)

Thanks for the compliment, although I suppose I could've spent more time trying to find a way to incorporate those subtle references. I guess I was simply too excited to enter the contest. :D

[GoldRock 6,165]

Thanks for the compliment, although I suppose I could've spent more time trying to find a way to incorporate those subtle references. I guess I was simply too excited to enter the contest. :D

You're welcome; it was a strong entry, and it's a good solid first article :P

[r_wienerschnitzel0 25]

Better than mine IMO.

Good job!

[dolahbk 27]

AOJSD  , gonrats man  , keep up the good work

[donut70 97]

Congrats, and nice ending; though this isn't the way I'd have finished the series, what with my subtle refernces to Factory and Future and the felling of escalating tension in the third part, it's well-written. Nice work ;)

yeah I felt that way to. He made a good ending, but not what I would have expected

[cole1811 1]

great ending! very unexpected. :D

[aojsd 144]

great ending! very unexpected. :D

Thank You! I'm sure the ending you wrote was excellent as well, contest-winner.  :D  ;)