Contest [Issue 17] Double Stanza

[TheLonelyEpic 212]

 

Stopping By Woods :

 

 

Whose woods these are I think I know.

His house is in the village though,

He will not see me stopping here

To watch his woods fill up with snow.

 

My little tank must think it queer

To stop without a crystal box near

Between the woods and the frozen lake

The darkest evening of the year.

 

The woods are lovely, dark and deep

But I have Gold Boxes to keep

And miles to before I sleep

And miles to before I sleep..

 

( B.R.A.V.E )

 

At least you changed some words, but please give some credit to Robert Frost.

Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening

 

Whose woods these are I think I know.   

His house is in the village though;   

He will not see me stopping here   

To watch his woods fill up with snow.   

 

My little horse must think it queer   

To stop without a farmhouse near   

Between the woods and frozen lake   

The darkest evening of the year.   

 

He gives his harness bells a shake   

To ask if there is some mistake.   

The only other sound’s the sweep   

Of easy wind and downy flake.   

 

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.   

But I have promises to keep,   

And miles to go before I sleep,   

And miles to go before I sleep.

Edited November 8, 2013 by TheLonelyEpic

[DeadBolt 54]

“Firebird”

Power of a Phoenix.

Fire, flew and flowed,     A

As smooth as snow     B

Spewed like volcanos ,      C

Ready to blow!     B

 

So ,I declare you must beware;    A

Soon you’ll be in great despair!    A

Don’t hide now, get in a row    B

You’ll soon know to heave some woe    B

 

A firebird hot as thou ,you’ll be in great wow    A

To those who burn you on picket.    B

You’ll know why you quake,      C

Its cause I burn with such great wicket,     B

 

Your bones creek and stay awake.    A

So here I go, burn and roast you tanks to toast!    B

All you do is die as I stand and boast!    B

     I’ll kill you fast, and strike some fear!     C

Alliteration, onomatopoeia, hyperbole , simile

Rhyme

Edited November 8, 2013 by DeadBolt

[emoNinja 17]

Tanki Online, the game I love to play most.

I log on once I get home, ready to boast.

I enter the garage, preparing for war.

I pick my best combo, so fast it's a blur.

 

I cannot contain the emotion inside.

So much skill I leave everyone to criticize.

Once on I let my tank do the talking.

The best thing for you, is to just keep walking.

[theabc 87]

Godmode_ON

Godmode_ON oh Godmode_ON,
t'was i fond. his 98% paint almost made me faint.
while he killed us one by one i thought to get a better gun.
i took my thunder and shot his hull five times but still his health
completely full. he kept on shooting until we were dead. but then someone with great delight said
"aim at his rear end!" we hit him there then he gave a cold stare.
then he shot. I thought to myself i'm not going to stay in this spot!
finally it came to a end. I actually became friends with him!

THE END

 

BTW I never saw him or became friends with him and this was my first poem :)

Edited November 14, 2013 by theabc

[GoldRock2 290]

At least you changed some words, but please give some credit to Robert Frost.

It's not a case of giving credit... He's practically copied that poem.

[Xerothermic 44]

All I can say is, you guys are good at taking out plagarisers - I'd help you but since poetry isn't my strong point, I barely know any.

[Royalworld 1,269]

Don't think you can evade the rules just because you don't like them. It doesn't work like that.

That would be decided by Arch, and why do you want to interfere with everyone's poem? I know you're too excited to win. and i wish you good luck, but please stop posting unnecessary things because i think arch can read himself. And commenting no others poem would just increase the time he has to spend.

Edited November 8, 2013 by Royalworld

[Xerothermic 44]

That would be decided by Arch, and why do you want to interfere with everyone's poem? I know you're too excited to win. and i wish you good luck, but please stop posting unnecessary things because i think arch can read himself. And commenting no others poem would just increase the time he has to spend.

He's already decided that the maximum is 16 lines hence why he put it in the OP; don't spew such nonsense! I'm not "interfering" with any poems - you seem to think that you can evade the 16 line rule because you don't like it. All I did was imply to you that you can't do that.

 

And you've only contributed to the "unnecessary things" by making that message so you're a hypocrite - don't tell me what not to do if you can't resist from doing it yourself.

 

Yes, I am excited to win because this is a heated contest - many good entries have been posted with many good rhymes (barring "this game is great like grace") so I am excited - deal with it.

 

And more time? Are you being stupid on purpose? If the poem isn't actually a poem, he only has to skip it completely.

Edited November 8, 2013 by Xerothermic

[Royalworld 1,269]

He's already decided that the maximum is 16 lines hence why he put it in the OP; don't spew such nonsense! I'm not "interfering" with any poems - you seem to think that you can evade the 16 line rule because you don't like it. All I did was imply to you that you can't do that.

 

And you've only contributed to the "unnecessary things" by making that message so you're a hypocrite - don't tell me what not to do if you can't resist from doing it yourself.

 

Yes, I am excited to win because this is a heated contest - many good entries have been posted with many good rhymes (barring "this game is great like grace") so I am excited - deal with it.

 

And more time? Are you being stupid on purpose? If the poem isn't actually a poem, he only has to skip it completely.

Well idc what others say about my poem, but a poem can have as many lines it wants to. And arch will decide to completely ignore it or whatever he likes.

Edited November 8, 2013 by Royalworld

[Xerothermic 44]

Well idc what others say about my poem, but a poem can have as many lines it wants to. And arch will decide to completely ignore it or whatever he likes.

Okay, you've wasted your time by posting it then. And you've responded to none of my points - we're done here.

[Xerothermic 44]

Well idc what others say about my poem, but a poem can have as many lines it wants to. And arch will decide to completely ignore it or whatever he likes.

Okay, you've wasted your time by posting it then. And you've responded to none of my points - we're done here.

 

EDIT: Major lag...

Edited November 8, 2013 by Xerothermic

[Ghost22Recon 22]

                               >>> Struggle with the forces of <<<

                                                        See how to raise clouds of smoke
                   On the black mountains in the battle witn the forces of.
                                Fierce struggles Mamoth and Titan,
                                flashing lightning raging railgun.
                                

                                I'm running the Canyon dustraised
                                Follow me Wasp swift as an arrow
                             Blocking my way and poured ice on me.
                                  I'm freezing and watch in silence.


                               Born in the base,my team is not there
                                 Fighting for flag,dying one by one.
                            Activate row double armor,power and nitro.
                             I go to a raging group of angry opponents.


                             Wounded all the opponents are easy to kill.
                           Making my way through the destroyed tanks.
                                     I take the flag,which is the last.
                                I'm putting on our,followed by victory. 
 

[RaMaNuJGO 7]

 

                                                         NO se ocurrio un nombre :) 

                

Un ángel no nos escoge, Dios nos lo asigna.

Un amigo nos toma de la mano y nos acerca a Dios.

 

Un ángel tiene la obligación de cuidarnos.

Un amigo nos cuida por amor.

 

Un ángel te ayuda evitando que tengas problemas.

Un amigo te ayuda a resolverlos.

 

Un ángel te ve sufrir, sin poderte abrazar.

Un amigo te abraza, porque no quiere verte sufrir.

 

Un ángel te ve sonreír y observa tus alegrías.

Un amigo te hace sonreír y te hace parte de sus alegrías.

 

Un ángel sabe cuando necesitas que alguien te escuche.

Un amigo te escucha, sin decirle que lo necesitas.

 

Un ángel, en realidad es parte de tus sueños.

Un amigo, comparte y lucha por que tus sueños,

sean una realidad.

 

Un ángel siempre esta contigo ahí, sabe extrañarnos.

Un amigo, cuando no esta contigo, no solo te extraña,

también piensa en ti.

 

Un ángel vela tu sueño.

Un amigo sueña contigo.

 

Un ángel aplaude tus triunfos.

Un amigo te ayuda para que triunfes.

 

Un ángel se preocupa cuando estas mal.

Un amigo se desvive porque estés bien.

 

Un ángel recibe una oración tuya.

Un amigo hace una oración por tí.

 

Un ángel te ayuda a sobrevivir.

Un amigo vive por ti.

 

Para un ángel, eres una hermosa misión que cumplir.

Para un amigo, eres un tesoro que defender.

 

Un ángel, es algo celestial.

Un amigo es la oportunidad de conocer lo más

hermoso que hay en la vida,"el amor y la amistad".

 

Un ángel quiere ser tu amigo.

Un amigo, sin proponérselo, también es tu Angel. :wub: 

 

Hey, You aren't allowed to write more than 16 lines!!!!!!! Read the rules. And I think that the contest is for English only. It isn't related to tanki too.DON'T CHEAT. Does nobody realize that?

Hey , no se le permite escribir más de 16 líneas ¡¡¡ ¡¡¡ ! Lea las reglas. Y creo que el concurso es sólo para Inglés . No está relacionada con tanki too.DON 'T CHEAT . ¿Se dan cuenta de que nadie ?

Edited November 8, 2013 by RaMaNuJGO

[newforumplayer 25]

Half of the Poems have no Rhyme! What a fail!

[hogree 4,179]

Guys, I hope you realise that the newspaper team can spot plagiarism when we see it. Thanks for your help all the same in telling us, but it would be optimal if little discussion could flood onto this topic, and it be rather full of entries, rather than arguments. I hope you can trust that We can judge fairly. Thanks. ;)

[Royalworld 1,269]

Okay, you've wasted your time by posting it then. And you've responded to none of my points - we're done here.

 

EDIT: Major lag...

That's because i don't like to argue on small things

Again i wish you good luck for contest

[theabc 87]

Half of the Poems have no Rhyme! What a fail!

whats so bad about mine?! :angry:  :huh: it rhymes! ^_^

[Xerothermic 44]

That's because i don't like to argue on small things

Again i wish you good luck for contest

Yeah, you wish that was why - don't start what you can't finish. 

Good luck to you too (although your submission is invalid)

Edited November 8, 2013 by Xerothermic

[DarkOperative 5,580]

                                                                         Railgun

I get bored and go to the garage,

To change my combo,

When I see railgun,

I equip it like a weirdo

 

 

 

I go the the battlefield,

I find many wasps to kill,

Kept killing and killing,

In the end, they paid the bill

 

 

 

I come back to the garage,

Looking for something else then Railgun,

O boy, nothing better then that,

Not even a rocket launcher or a shotgun

Edited November 8, 2013 by DarkOperative

[DarkOperative 5,580]

^ First time ever. :)

Edited November 8, 2013 by DarkOperative

[HeroPlayer 797]

Hornet,

 

The beauty tank,

So fast and strong,

The mustang as comparison,

Also very slank,

 

Grow up with hornet,

Feel yourself proud,

Get kills, and do it bellissimo,

And become a Generalissimo,

[JonathanBernatowicz 119]

No one bothers to read the maximum of 16 lines rule, do they?

Oh, sorry I didn't explain at the end "This is my rough draft, will edit later to see what I should remove". My fault--I did read that though. Thanks for your post, now I can edit it to say this. I've got more than 2 weeks.

[Remaine 4,687]

Oh, sorry I didn't explain at the end "This is my rough draft, will edit later to see what I should remove". My fault--I did read that though. Thanks for your post, now I can edit it to say this. I've got more than 2 weeks.

NP

[Nirvan103 4]

                  Tanki

We start from the recruiters to the Generilismo!

There's a long way to go!

In the way we get some good moments

and we make friends!

 

Oh Tanki, the way we teach to battle!
Oh Tanki, to make friends!
From smoky to Richocet!

From Wasp to Viking!

Oh Tanki!

 

 

[adityatm 2]

 ISIDA'S STRONG AND WEAK POINTS

 

I am an helper who helps others,

In turn they help me,

When im there, they are well

When im not there, they arent well.

 

I need them for my advantage,

And they need me for their advantage,

I am a weapon of healing,

And not destruction.

 

But when they all leave, I am an easy target,

Who is vulnerable to all,

But still the most targeted target,

Because i am "ISIDA"