A story :p

[Nltobh 498]

On a lone winter night there was one called firebird he had no crystals to get money on the table for his children smokey Jr and thunder. His wife Railgun has a part time job in the battle field earning crystals she try'so hard to be on top of the other poor tankers one day she did not return from the battle. The husband firebird was worried about her so he left. He called his mother Ricochet to babysit the kid's. So he went on looking for his wife. He went into battles and left looking for her but he never found her. He went back home all sad. He told his mother that he did not find her anywhere. Two years has passed and she had not shown up. He went to look for her every day. On a summer day he has found her with another tanker called Thunder. When he seen her he went back home to his kid's and gave them to his mother and that day he has ended his life in a silence battle under the bridge. People say his body is still there. 

[Meliora 1,652]

Well... There are far too many apostrophes.

[Nltobh 498]

Well... There are far too many apostrophes.

well im not pro ok :l

[GoldRock 6,165]

The idea is good, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired. This could do with a good proofread, and should be longer, as currently it is too short for the reader to become involved in the plot.

 

Just what I think - good attempt, though, I like the idea especially ^_^

[LETCHIK_WOLK 370]

So that explains the Firebird-Titan prop :D

[r_The-Player20 313]

So his wife had and affair with Firebird's son.

[Remaine 4,687]

So his wife had and affair with Firebird's son.

another tanker called Thunder

"another tanker" was mentioned for a reason, ya'know.

[r_The-Player20 313]

Ha, I knew. But I wanted to say it anyways.

[Remaine 4,687]

Ha, I knew. But I wanted to say it anyways.

Tsk.

[r_roma0770 21]

ok

Edited October 27, 2013 by r_roma0770

[r_DidYouKnowThat0 1,662]

The Wife should've been the Firebird- if you know what I mean. :P

[Fjelstad1678 186]

try's

Try's what? Hot dog?

 

 

kid's.

 

Kid's what? Doughnut?

GRAMMAR TIME! 

an 's shows possession. 

 

E.g. That is George's pencil. = George owns that pencil

 

If you are trying to make a word plural, an ' is not needed.

 

Sorry, I think I just got a case of Selena...

[FederalBureauFBI 2,881]

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