Contest [Issue 31] Describe This in 100 Words!

[obsidianlover4242 2]

 

It was a calm August day, the summer breeze, birds chirping, the battle was no different than any other... until the sirens pierced every tanker's ears. On the top of the screen, the words Gold box will be dropped soon flashed. From a calm, nonchalant mood, my heart began to pump more vigorously. The treasures in that gold, shiny box quickly became everyone's attention. Every tanker was desperately looking, and so was I. As I drove down the ramp, a golden symbol became visible. As the gold box descended closer and closer to the ground, I closed my eyes. The words that I took the gold box, angered everyone, and the shells of my enemies pulverized me, as a ball of flame emerged.

 

 

 

 

I know this will not win, but just gonna try -_-

yu never know. Perhaps you could make it to 1st. (Sparkly hand effects) If you believe in yourself!!! <- NEVER go by this, it takes more than belief, you should KNOW you can be 1st, not believe, as the little blue engine believed he could, but did not know, so he exploded into a HUGE fireball.

[obsidianlover4242 2]

 It was a fine day, the battle was scored 999,999,999,000 points,and they only scored a mere,  :fire_l: 2  :fire_r: !!!!!  And...GOLD BOX!!!      So everyone RACED to the scene,tanks from all over the battle field. SMOKY. HAMMER. FIREBIRD. FREEZE. THUNDER. EVERYTHING!!!

I was using the OP HAMMER at the time,so 50, I was able to flip,destroy and even send to MARS, ALL of the other tanks trying to get the GOLD BOX!!!!  But... one of the tanks that were sent flying up to MARS , fell out of the sky,and took the GOLD BOX!!!    which was, INCHES, away from my tank.  :angry:

 

about 101 words,and I had a LOT of fun writing this. ENJOY!!!

I had  hope a LOT of fun writing this, and I hope ill get some sort of prize, It was WAY funner than the last one, maybe I had because this is my 2nd, or the picture was able to have better stories. Anyway, the other stories were VERY good, they were pretty entertaining!!!

[BobotheDerpHead 0]

After respawning, my job of watching Point A was uneventful. Seriously, I was getting as much action as a nun gets on Valentine's Day. It's pretty odd, because a couple seconds earlier everyone was flocking to my location trying to capture it. Did I miss something? Never mind, there they are, coming towards me... Wait. Not me, a 1000 crystal box that just materialized. And in two seconds, the game changed from CP to Deathmatch. The thirst is real, I thought. I cooly watched as the carnage unfolded; flamethowers and freezes and thunders, oh my! Biding my time, I took advantage of my height and shoved my way into the mass, clipping the box with my turret.
 
Oh, the advantages of having a Dictator...
 
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Total of 124 words

 

 

So size DOES matter after all. ;)

 

[opidude 437]

What a boisterous battle it was,

 

seeing deadly fires and fatal mines,

 

gun shots drumming and the cries of the fallen,

 

was like feasts for my eyes and music for my ears,

 

when a booming alarm shot.

 

The battlers went barbaric with commotions,

 

but the moment of glory was yet to come,

 

when a bright gold coffer cleaved down,

 

for one providential antagonist,

 

was bound to parlay the precious wad,

 

For combatants apperceived that it was hopeless,

 

regarding the defunct aggressor's gracious tears,

 

whilst others weep on the crisp floor.

 

                               the end -Opidude

Its 2fab4u lol it took a loong time making this but it was fun, its 100% original from my heart

[M4TR1X_FX 1]

I was just in an ordinary battle shooting everything i saw and watching firebirds smolder the unlucky ones. I was being destroyed by a small thunder until i saw Gold Box Will Be Dropped Soon."YES" i thought. I was the king of gold. As i respawned near the large brown ramp i saw a HUGE pile near the corner of the map. "It MUST be there" I saw the golden, shiny, box apear right in the sky. I turned on nitro and rushed over as it fell to the ground. SKWING! BOOM! "YES!!!" i yelled as it dropped on me. I felt sadness at the other tanks, but i was to happy to fell sorry for them.

 

 

(118 words) :tank:       

[danilici852 92]

In a Polygon  map I tried to get points for our team .There was   unfavorable weather ,it was  raining . Everyone fought as best they could, the score was tied, but the enemy team captured the  point. Suddenly, even when I didn't know what to do, the Gold Box was announced  .All players look for the  sign, I could't find the sign but suddenly a yellow light made me see where it would fall .With a crazy  speed, I  came at last to the sign, I was stopped by some tanks with freeze but I climbed few tanks as if I had recieved an extra power and managed to get the  Gold Box  before a tank  destroyed me. Suddenly the good weather appeared .

 

 

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Edited February 6, 2015 by danilici852

[stuartb 234]

In a Polygon map I tryed to get points for our team .There wasn't a favorable weather ,was raining . Everyone fight as best he could, the score was tie, but the enemy team captured the point. Suddenly, even when I didn't know what to do, it was announced the Gold Box .All players look for the sign, I can't find the sign but suddenly a yellow light made me see where it falls .With a crazy speed, I came at last to the sign, I was stopped by some tanks with freeze but as if I have received an extra power I had climbed few tanks and managed to get the Gold Box even before a tank destroyed me. Suddenly the good weather appear .

 

 

124

 

um.. Dani u have an lot of grammar mistakes like (everyone fight as best of He could) plc check your work.just trying to help ^_^

[f22jet 0]

“Uh… come on, come on,” I was repeatedly saying it to myself I just needed only 1 more thousand for me to buy my dream turret. It was pretty useless since we were in the losing team and even I was one of the lowest people there on the statistics. But then the shrilling sound of the air raid siren was heard ‘GOLD BOX WAS DROPPING’ I saw a golden box outlined with white was dropping I jumped and I closed up on the Gold Box but then I was completely overwhelmed. “Nooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!,” I screamed I died but I re spawned pretty quickly but it was too late … “CONGRATULATIONS senyu-t-33” You my friend has just got a beautiful goldbox.

[Ella_The_Puppy 0]

So there I was in the heat of the battle me and my fellow tankers were were playing in a capture points in polygon. I joined in first so I had the most points 890 to be exact. so I was on the bridge driving over to the point when I suddenly saw the most wanted 6 words any tanker could ask for Gold Box Will Be Dropped Soon. since the gold box drops 20 seconds after I quickly drove off to get my health reset. I spawn in right beside the gold box and I BAMM it drops I stay on it people rushing in form everywhere but alas I get it and the world was a happier place (for me at least)

 

120 words

[sudeeprauta 150]

So here's my story.......

 

It was a reprisal cold night in the streets of polygon. The tanks were wiggling for fun.

A sudden notification appeared on my screen "Gold Box Will Be Dropped Soon".This made all the players zealous.

Now finding the golden blotch was drudgery work.Suddenly a tankist shouted "The casket's falling". Everyone including me rushed 

their catamarans near the blotch to get the precious casket.No generosity was shown. Tanks were confrontation for the casket.

All tankers were congregating and formed a tall pylon.My dictator caught hold of the casket and was demolished into chunks.

I knew I was a astute tanker of the tankionline community 

[mdit108 121]

In the midst of an intense polygon battle, a map renowned for gold catching, the gold box gently touching the steel of my railgun turret. A moment of excitement and more of amusement. Surrounded amongst the dreaded hammer turrets, I had lost hopes of achieving this benefaction. However, destiny favoured me this time around.

Dismay, the only feeling around, prevailed in my enemies' minds. Many seemed excessively disappointed on this failure of seizing this endowment, however such infrequent gifts aren't written in the fates of all.

Drops of water ultimately get together to form a river, similarly this mere amount of crystals was enough for me to get the edge over foes on the battlefield.

 

Word Count: 115.

Edited February 5, 2015 by mdit108

[tanker538N 394]

'I remember like it was yesterday' said a now old, Winner_Of_Turkey as he looked dramatically into the horizon. 'Tell us grandpa!' his excited grandchilren said in unisen. 'Alright, alright,' laughed Turkey. 'It was like any other match. The same old battle and make-thing-go-boom attitude. Focusing on my gameplay I just about barely was able to see the light orange sign above my head. I gasped. Finally! Unlike other times I saw the drop zone right in front of me !' 'Woah!!' one of his grandsons said. ' I waited until I could see the large gold painted box right above my head. And then i rushed like mad! I heard my tracks rumble on the cobblestone floor.  I stood right on top of the drop zone... but that was my mistake. Everyone shot me and i died when the piercing bullet of a railgun shot right through my hull. In the end I couldn't catch it but it was  a very close call...' said Turkey in a softer tone. 'Wish you couldv'e caught it' hos grandson said. 'Me too..... me too' 

 

word count: too much :P I amn't expecting to win I would  just like kev's opinion on this short story.

Edited February 4, 2015 by tanker538N

[fnaltdelete2 0]

I was thinking about homework and about how I should do this 100 word project, so I took my mind off it to play Tanki Online. What was totally shocking is that I never see ANY "Gold box will be dropped soon." notifications on a polygon battle, but I saw one there. So I was like, WHOA. I totally got to get this gold box. Well, it didn't turn out that way.  What I did was I jumped onto the WHOLE entire bunch of tanks, and was right under it. I thought, "I got this in the bag!" Just the jinx I needed. A stupid Railgun/Dictator killed me and he got the gold box. So I never played on a polygon battle again.

Edited February 4, 2015 by fnaltdelete2

[fnaltdelete2 0]

I hope u like my entry!! My word count was exactly 124! Go figure. I mean, it can't be OVER 125, so it's good enough.

 

Congrats 2 all the winners (it DEFINITELY will NOT be me. I have and F on writing)!

 

-fnaltdelete2

 

P.S:

 

I've only caught 6 gold boxes (IN MY LIFE).  :(  I know, it's totally lame. I'm not the best at Tanki, but it's fun 2 play (REALLY FUN!).  

Edited February 4, 2015 by fnaltdelete2

[FaaiqBilal1 795]

The Gold Box

 

 To those who do not know what this mysterious object is, will wonder and doubt its importance, its incentive to halt the battle. Was it the wealth it comprised of, or was it the feeling of self achievement? The thought puzzled me, but just for a moment, since my attention diverted towards the parachute that made its way down. Time had stopped, and then, it struck me. Every tanker on the battlefield made his way towards the object. We pushed and tugged. I closed my eyes as my golden, beautiful name appeared on the top of the screen. I had done it, I had taken the gold box! The value was rather puny, but the triumphant glory of having taken it was worth the pride.

[Kevred 1,586]

'I remember like it was yesterday' said a now old, Winner_Of_Turkey as he looked dramatically into the horizon. 'Tell us grandpa!' his excited grandchilren said in unisen. 'Alright, alright,' laughed Turkey. 'It was like any other match. The same old battle and make-thing-go-boom attitude. Focusing on my gameplay I just about barely was able to see the light orange sign above my head. I gasped. Finally! Unlike other times I saw the drop zone right in front of me !' 'Woah!!' one of his grandsons said. ' I waited until I could see the large gold painted box right above my head. And then i rushed like mad! I heard my tracks rumble on the cobblestone floor.  I stood right on top of the drop zone... but that was my mistake. Everyone shot me and i died when the piercing bullet of a railgun shot right through my hull. In the end I couldn't catch it but it was  a very close call...' said Turkey in a softer tone. 'Wish you couldv'e caught it' hos grandson said. 'Me too..... me too' 

 

word count: too much :P I amn't expecting to win I would  just like kev's opinion on this short story.

If you know you your entry is disqualified, why post it here? Just send it to my PM if you want my opinion.

 

 

 

Arrg I just can't resist it:

1. Breaking text into smaller paragraphs is generally better.

2. Watch out for dialogue rules.

3. typos

 

 

[HUGHIY 568]

One aim--gold. And one failure.

 

I charged straight into the massacre of fire, ice and shells headfirst. The roar around me intensified my excitement. This was the day that all that abuse ended. I would finally catch the elusive, glittering gold.

 

But it wasn't.

 

Time stood still as I watched on helplessly from above, having been tortured and blown to pieces mercilessly by dominant dictators. I could see the gold vanish in the distance.

 

The dash of hope faded. The chance I had was gone. My mind is now lost forever in a world of smoke which is rising slowly above me. I can only watch. And it's my mind which has reached the brink of insanity.

 

I was alone; I am still alone.

Count: 125

Edited February 5, 2015 by HUGHIY

[blackflag444 256]

As I charged through the streets of polygon like a runaway bull, I searched hopelessly for the symbol of that amazing golden treasure chest. I had almost given up. But then I saw it, dropping into the clutches of a lucky tanker.... and I was almost certain it wasn't going to be me.

 

I rushed towards the gift from heaven and climbed on top an unfortunate team mate of mine, closed my eyes and waited.... waited to see if it was mine.

 

I finally opened my eyes..... and I saw my name in those big, dark orange letters. It was only 1000 crystals, but I was still overwhelmed with joy.... in my destroyed tank.

Edited February 21, 2015 by blackflag444

[obsidianlover4242 2]

One objective-- gold. And one failure.

 

I charged straight into the massacre of fire, ice and shells headfirst. The roar all round me intensified my excitement. This was the day that all that abuse ended.

 

But it wasn't.

 

Time stood still as I watched on helplessly from above, having been tortured and blown to pieces mercilessly by taunting tankers. I could see the vacant point in the distance.

 

All I can do now is rush for the point, hoping to be unnoticed by the dictators of the battle in the gold rush. But that rush will have been done. Order will have been restored. And it will be my mind which has reached the brink of insanity.

 

I was alone. I am still alone.

Count: 124

NOTHING, about any one, or anything taking the G-box, did your character just not see anyone take it, but just wanted to win the CP match?

 

As I walked through the battlefield, standing over all the tankers through the vast battleground, Polygon, I was so happy when I saw it. “Gold box will be dropped soon”. We all knew it was only 1000 crystals, but it was still so amazing. “20 seconds before it drops, 20 seconds before it drops”, I thought to myself. The time flew by faster then it should've. Then I saw it dropping. I raced towards it, gladly with no one in my way, the I managed to get on top of my team mate, but I was losing health fast. I wasn't sure if I could hold on, but next thing I knew, I got it! I knew dictator's extra height would be handy.

GREAT!!!! Mine is better though, on page 2

[aquafurgle1 95]

u shouldn't say that!

say wut?

[Mr.Ashir 365]

"It is impossible that there is a word called impossible"

I was playing Polygon CP,first time,with m2 dictator and m3 rail,the best combo I had,while others were having m3 equipments like M3 Hammer,Firebird,Freeze, Thunder and Smoky e.t.c.Suddenly there came a voice which was of a lottery at least for me.First I was assured that I won't be able to take it.My heart started to swell.Then a spirit came from no where and I rushed into the crowd,Dictator with smoky started shooting me but my one magnificent shot of rail killed that tanker and at last but not the least my dictator's front patted the GoldBox!

Word Limit:117 words. :)

Edited February 6, 2015 by Mr.Ashir

[HUGHIY 568]

NOTHING, about any one, or anything taking the G-box, did your character just not see anyone take it, but just wanted to win the CP match?

 

GREAT!!!! Mine is better though, on page 2

Um...I was half asleep when I wrote it. I'll edit it from time to time.

[Barrett.50 4]

It was a day with many aged war torn tankers that had been fighting for years upon end improving their skill and raising to the ranks upgrading their' equipment. It was on the old battleground: Silence, and it was Control points and we where out numbered by nearly 2:1! there was no hope for victory and very little fund for what we had done... But than! there was a line of familiar words on my HUD: GOLDBOX WILL BE DROPPED SOON, I had a chance for it!... Than I find the drop spot right as it falls... JUST IN TIME! I caught it!

 

I think it's right around 104.

[danilici852 92]

um.. Dani u have an lot of grammar mistakes like (everyone fight as best of He could) plc check your work.just trying to help ^_^

friend when you will speak romanian corectly you can help me  but you don t know anything from my language :)

Edited February 5, 2015 by danilici852

[danilici852 92]

friend when you will speak romanian corectly you can help me  but you don t know anything from my language :)

i hate those people wich insult my work ,like you stuart !