Contest [Issue 52] Continue the Story 3

[greyat 2,972]

Welcome to the third revision of this contest! If you have not heard about this contest before, you can find all the previous chapters of the first and second editions in the newspaper archive. The final products are here:

 

[issue 30] The Grand Offensive - Completed! - Newspaper Archive - Tanki Online Forum

[issue 39] Inner Truths - Newspaper Archive - Tanki Online Forum

 

Your task is in the title: write a chapter of a story, forming a logical succession to the previous one. Seeing as that this is the first chapter, you are free to determine the topic.

 

The winner will receive a 40,000 crystal reward, and the recognition of their entry being featured in the next issue.

 

Your entry will be judged on the following, in order of importance:

• It must be your own work, completely original. PLAGIARISM MAY RESULT IN DISQUALIFICATION FROM ALL NEWSPAPER CONTESTS.
  

• Content - it should be interesting, and have potential to be developed further with each chapter.
  
• Quality of writing.
  

Furthermore, to emphasise quality over quantity, there is an informal word limit of 500 words. Slightly over is acceptable. Make every word count!

 

Deadline is 20th April! Late entries may not be considered!

 

Other notable entries may receive a 10,000 crystal consolation prize.

 

Good luck!

Edited November 18, 2017 by Flexoo

[l.Eat.My.BuIIets 483]

I'll try it out, though I didnt understand what  story to write.

Can someone explain

[Rayyan 3,415]

Yeah, so its like make a new story?

[DragonOfStorms 2,706]

So we need to continue the previous chapter of the story in Issue 39?

[Lhamster 4,081]

Errata:

 

• The topic of the story is up to you.
• Entries are to be submitted here, under this topic.
• Please refrain from reserving posts, as it is highly irritating and serves no decent purpose.

Edited April 1, 2016 by greyat

[Superlative 500]

I'll try it out, though I didnt understand what  story to write.

Can someone explain

 

Yeah, so its like make a new story?

 

So we need to continue the previous chapter of the story in Issue 39?

 

 

^ Wow, You guys certainly didnt read the main topic well. :o

 

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I'll consider joining for the next parts cuz I hate making up a story xD

[DragonOfStorms 2,706]

This is starting afresh, you can write about anything you like.

Thanks for the clarification.

 

@ Mr.Hilarious the explanation was somewhat unclear.

[Lethal_Injection 586]

Are there any topics specifically that we have to write about or can we write about anything?  I mean,  I know you said anything, but that just seems so broad... Also, do we post the entries here or pm them to you?

Edited April 1, 2016 by Lethal_Injection

[greyat 2,972]

See Hamster's hijacked post.

[Jwimmer 2,835]

So just write about anything?

 

The ambiguities are real

[lausaj 765]

Should we continue the chapters?

If so can we choose anyone of the above links and continue a chapter?

Or a new story is to be created? As the title is continue the story

[Tp0d 3]

why does Hamster always edit other peoples' posts?

Errata:

• The topic of the story is up to you.
• Entries are to be submitted here, under this topic.
• Please refrain from reserving posts, as it is highly irritating and serves no decent purpose.

What?

So we just write the first chapter of a story- I get that- but do we post it in this showtopic as a post?

[DrDeath3510 0]

I am new here where are we supposed to post our stories?

[l.Eat.My.BuIIets 483]

What?

So we just write the first chapter of a story- I get that- but do we post it in this showtopic as a post?

  

I am new here where are we supposed to post our stories?

You need to post it here,in this topic.

[VALKYRIE_RULER 215]

^ Wow, You guys certainly didnt read the main topic well. :o

 

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I'll consider joining for the next parts cuz I hate making up a story xD

lol I like reading them buut not making them

[Superlative 500]

lol I like reading them buut not making them

I dont like reading much these days...

[elementalfun 0]

Chapter 1 - Caught

 

I was starving, although that was nothing new. I was an average cutpurse in the slums, one among many actually. Out here we make our living off of any unlucky passerby's change so nothing is certain; not our food, our gritty dens, not even our lives. Today was an especially unlucky day for me, but it was one that would change my life. It was a rainy day, the worst. I could hear the splashes rats, which was exactly the problem. With this kind of weather you couldn't even sneak up on a deaf man let alone a noble. Not that there are people out in this weather to begin with.

 

But that's enough about me let's get on with the story. Sitting in my usual spot in my alleyway I could hear the pattering of the rain and nothing more. That is until I head the clopping of a horse and the familiar rumble of carriage wheels. To travel in this weather he must be insane I thought, but all the better for me. The streets were deserted and the carriage was unguarded, almost too easy. And so I didn't think twice about slipping out of my secluded alleyway unto the exposed streets. A bad choice on my part. I sidled up behind the carriage and matched my pace. I would slip in grab the noble and knock out the driver in one go. Or so I thought.

 

I had only just reached out towards the door that rough hands seized me from behind. I flailed and struggled behind the rough grip but it only tightened. I opened my mouth to scream out a plea for help but another hand shot for my throat. No sooner did he club me behind the head that I lost all conscience, but not before I fit in a distorted glare at my attacker.

 

Thinking back not I realized that I hadn't considered the fact that there was no guard visible in the first place. An armature mistake that would most surely lead to me death.

 

 

My entry ;)

[Bird_Lord 0]

 

Welcome to the third revision of this contest! If you have not heard about this contest before, you can find all the previous chapters of the first and second editions in the newspaper archive. The final products are here:

 

[issue 30] The Grand Offensive - Completed! - Newspaper Archive - Tanki Online Forum

[issue 39] Inner Truths - Newspaper Archive - Tanki Online Forum

 

Your task is in the title: write a chapter of a story, forming a logical succession to the previous one. Seeing as that this is the first chapter, you are free to determine the topic.

 

The winner will receive a 40,000 crystal reward, and the recognition of their entry being featured in the next issue.

 

Your entry will be judged on the following, in order of importance:

• It must be your own work, completely original. PLAGIARISM MAY RESULT IN DISQUALIFICATION FROM ALL NEWSPAPER CONTESTS.

• Content - it should be interesting, and have potential to be developed further with each chapter.
• Quality of writing.

Furthermore, to emphasise quality over quantity, there is an informal word limit of 500 words. Slightly over is acceptable. Make every word count!

 

Deadline is 20th April! Late entries may not be considered!

 

Other notable entries may receive a 10,000 crystal consolation prize.

 

Good luck!

 

How do we submit our text, and where do we write it?

[KillerGnat 3,135]

All right, I was bored.... In memory of Semyon, who's true reason for retirement has been revealed.

 

 

 

 

 

Mission Improbable

(cue some cool spy music)

 

 

 

Chapter 1: Infiltration

 

 

 

Perm, Russia 2016

 

 

Tankionline headquarters

 

 

 

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Semyon Kirov fearfully glanced at the building he had worked undercover in so long. The sun shone its last rays on the huge words emblazoned on the building's front: Tankionline. Darkness enveloped him atop the adjacent rooftop. 

 

"It's now or never," he thought. Once more, he skimmed the letter grasped in his hands.

 

 

Agent 24,

 

Your failure to fully infiltrate the Tanki headquarters greatly displeases us. Three years as a community manager should have been a sufficient amount of time to gain the information we need. Nevertheless, you did much to aid us during your stint, and we only lack one piece of data to complete our work. We understand that the janitor possesses very important details of the enemy's plans. Break in, and find them. Unfortunately, triggering the building's alarm system will mean instant death. Enter stealthily, and complete your mission swiftly. Most of the guards are on high alert, and have been ordered to shoot intruders on sight. For your sake, we hope you won't be seen. Good luck.

 

                                                                                                                    Regards, General Lee Simo

 

 

Zipping up his jacket to keep out the Russian chill, Semyon braced himself for the short walk from his current position to the Tanki building. He felt around in his pockets, mentally checking the contents off his list.

 

Flashlight, yes.

Knife, yes.

Tranquilizer gun, yes.

Rope, yes.

Floor plan, yes.

 

He strode to the back of the building, and began shinnying up the pipe. This was what he had trained for, the familiar adrenaline rush pulsed through him as he glanced at the asphalt below.

 

"Four years as a spy, and these missions never got old," he though. He made progress rapidly, and soon stopped at the twentieth floor. Consulting the map, he saw that the janitor office was just a short walk away. He flipped out a blade from his knife, and started sawing at the window. 

 

With a soft thud, he landed on the building floor. It was pitch black, but he could just make out the silhouette of a door frame in front of him. He walked stealthily to the janitor office. It seemed quiet, too quiet. With an expert hand, he sprung the lock, opening the door. The carpet muffled his footsteps as he padded across to the computer lying on the desk. 

 

"Too easy," he muttered. "This has got to be--" His words were cut off by a heart stopping click of a revolver. Semyon stopped, his heart sinking, and felt the cool steel of a pistol barrel press against his head.

 

 

 

Edit: Word count is 412 including everything but my opening blather.

 

Edit²: Changed the story slightly. The WC is now 438

Edited April 10, 2016 by KillerGnat

[Lethal_Injection 586]

^RIP Semyon, good luck @KillerGnat!

Edited April 3, 2016 by Lethal_Injection

[GeeVuh 1,647]

Money's Worth

 

Chapter 1: Marked

497 words excluding words that are BLUE

                                                                                                                                                                               

A few weeks after Robert, our main character, was freed from jail. Robert and Ethan are sitting on a bench, outside of a construction site.

"Well, Rob, it's been a long time since we've talked."

Robert shrugged and replied, "I got framed. I told 'em, they wouldn't listen. End of story." I silently stared at my lap.

"So, you wanna go get a sundae or somethin', Ethan? It's gettin' kinda hot out here." I nodded. "Alright, sure, why not? By the way, do you need help carrying your bags? They seem pretty heavy."

He was carrying a backpack and a laptop bag. He shook his head no.

                                              

 

"Huh. Let me check my wallet first... I'm sure I left it in my pocket. Nope, not there. Sorry, Rob, I guess you'll have to pay. I can pay you back lat-" 

"No, it's fine. You've already paid me back. I-I mean, with our friendship and all." 

"Alright... You sure about that?"

Robert quickly replied, "Yeah, it's fine. I got this, man." When he paid, his sleeve slipped, and I thought I saw a tattoo.

"Alright, Rob, lets be heading back to my house to eat there."

                                             

 

After we'd finished our sundaes, I asked him a question. "Hey, can I see that tattoo of yours? It looks really cool, but I couldn't really see it." 

He jolted, as if surprised. "Well... I guess it couldn't hurt." He pulled up his sleeve. 

An eagle with two swords crossed in front of it... I thought. "Wow, interesting tattoo, Rob! Does it have a meaning?" I asked.

He glanced around before replying. "Uhhh, I guess... It's just - it's just that I like eagles... and the swords look cool." He pulled the sleeve back down. "I guess I'll be going now. Oh, by the way, could I know where the bathroom is? I kinda need to, uh, go." I tried to suppress my laughter. "Yeah, upstairs, second door on the left."

                                             

 

I went upstairs to take a nap, but noticed that my drawers were open and my bed was a mess. 

What went on in here??? Have I been robbed? No! The door was locked, and no windows were open... Was it... no.. it couldn't be! But it has to... Robert did this???

I yelled out in anguish. "ROOBBEERRRTTTTTT!!!!!!!!"

 

                                             

The next day.

Robert was making his way back to the alley where his new gang met.

He suddenly broke out to his gang leader, "I had to show off my tattoo, by the way... Ethan was making a fuss about it. He's kinda stupid. Not sure why I even was friends with him." His voice had suddenly changed into the "tough guy" mode.

His gang leader replied, "Don't do it again."

Robert quickly replied, "I'm moving out of the city to meet our other branch. I don't feel like getting found out by Ethan. I took all the valuable stuff that was in his room. Wasn't that much, just a bit of money and some of his wife's jewelry."

His gang leader laughed, "Well, well... I suppose showing off our gang mark was worth it."

Robert laughed humorlessly, "Yes, yes, it was."

                                             

Edited April 15, 2016 by GeeVuh

[KillerGnat 3,135]

^RIP Semyon, good luck @KillerGnat!

Ty L_I. I can kiss my chances of winning goodbye, though, if you're gonna enter  ;).

 

Edited April 4, 2016 by greyat
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[GeeVuh 1,647]

Ty L_I. I can kiss my chances of winning goodbye, though, if you're gonna enter  ;).

 

Nice! My idea of a second chapter is rather different from your one, but that's the beauty of this contest :). Complete originality with each installation.

Thanks! Maybe no one will have any ideas for mine, and no one will post... so I'm near guaranteed to get at least 10k :lol:

[MOO_I_AM_A_COW 110]

Thanks! Maybe no one will have any ideas for mine, and no one will post... so I'm near guaranteed to get at least 10k :lol:

I'm 99% you are supposed to right the first chapter of a story for THIS part of the contest. So you may want to tuck that away if KillerKnat wins and write another one for now.

[DragonOfStorms 2,706]

 

Chapter 2 of KillerGnat. Will be from Kasim's point of view

 

 

"Well, Semyon, I sure didn't expect this, especially not from our beloved Community Manager..." I said with a slur.

Semyon looked up with a defiant glare. "I told you already. It wasn't my fault."

I meditated on this statement for a few seconds, then replied, "Hm... then I suppose you'll bring up that stupid "General Lee Simo" story, again? What did he give you, supposedly... A few crystals?"

He stuttered as he said, "Well... h-he said th-that he would k-kill me if I failed again."

I quickly glanced at the letter I'd taken from him. "Hmm.... this says nothing about killing you... Perhaps he had planned this all along. Perhaps he wanted to get rid of you... I can imagine how much of a nuisance you'd be. Even as Community Manager you were quite the annoyance." I coughed as I tried to suppress my laughter.

"Guards! Take him out! I don't expect to get anything out of this man anymore, not today, at least." I heard Semyon screeching as he was dragged back to his cell inside the building.

"NEVER!!! I AM HIS BEST AGENT!!! HE PROMISED ME A MILLION DOLLARS IF I FINISHED MY MISSION!!!"

I turned my chair quickly. "What did you say? What was your mission? Tell me, or you're dead, NOW!" He quieted down quickly. "Now, Semyon, or my guards pull the trigger."

He whimpered as he replied, "I was supposed to take the important data from the janitor's office... so that we could get in... to take over Tanki..." I thought about this. "Is this the truth, Semyon? By the way, what was he planning to do with me?" He started bawling, but my guards stopped it with a swift kick in the ribs.

Out of breath, he managed to say, "Oh yeah, it's the truth. A-and... he was planning to make me murder you! Of course I would never do it, we've become quite the pair of friends over the past 3 years..."

I replied, "Well, I don't know what to expect anymore. You're going back to your cell."

 

 

Nice writing style! I think you made Semyon too whiny, though. Edited April 4, 2016 by DragonOfStorms