Contest [Issue 76] Continue The Story - Final Chapter V

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

How is a mammoth and isida obscene?

It will give kids nightmares thinking about them using the combo on the map Brest...

[thethiefofvictory 339]

It will give kids nightmares thinking about them using the combo on the map Brest...

There, idea for Tanki story. Thanks! :p

[Person_Random 4,991]

Congrats @thethiefofvictory on the rank up!  I don't know why I'm saying this.  Oh no so many entries.  Time to believe in the power of writing a story without doubting myself.

 

And @Royalworld, your story is great.  There are some grammar errors here and there, but there is time.  But then I thought Gerald was against guns...

Edited July 19, 2018 by Person_Random

[thethiefofvictory 339]

But then I thought Gerald was against guns...

"Not bad for a first kill. It's in the blood."

 

He felt a gun in his right hand. He raised it, and sure enough, there was a gun.

 

"That gun you hold is one you've held many times before."

 

"I call her Nancy."

 

Not the first story this issue to give Gerald a gun, I think. :p Basically, he can wield weapons.

[Person_Random 4,991]

"Not bad for a first kill. It's in the blood."

 

He felt a gun in his right hand. He raised it, and sure enough, there was a gun.

 

"That gun you hold is one you've held many times before."

 

"I call her Nancy."

 

Not the first story this issue to give Gerald a gun, I think. :P Basically, he can wield weapons.

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[Royalworld 1,269]

And @Royalworld, your story is great.  There are some grammar errors here and there, but there is time.  But then I thought Gerald was against guns...

Why do you think Gerald is against guns? Any mentions before? As for grammar, do you mean commas and stuff, or bigger mistakes?

I am not that good with it but I tried my best :p

Edited July 20, 2018 by Royalworld

[Person_Random 4,991]

Why do you think Gerald is against guns? Any mentions before? As for grammar, do you mean commas and stuff, or bigger mistakes?

I am not that good with it but I tried my best :P

Verb tenses.  And maybe change the dialogue.  Too ping-pong.

[thethiefofvictory 339]

Waaiit, deadline is 27 July, today is 29 July, shouldn't this topic be closed by now? Please, please don't tell us it's been delayed again.