Contest [Issue 76] Continue The Story - Final Chapter V

[Person_Random 4,991]

Grand always wins :P

 

 

 

 

Except when I win :ph34r:

Watch when it happens again next issue...

[C.O.N.Q.U.E.R.O.R 3,845]

Watch when it happens again next issue...

Too bad I didn't have time to finish my guide and an entry for this.. would've been fun.

 

I also wanted to ask what I could've improved in my story (The Shock). Just wondering :p

Edited June 22, 2018 by C.O.N.Q.U.E.R.O.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

Too bad I didn't have time to finish my guide and an entry for this.. would've been fun.

 

I also wanted to ask what I could've improved in my story (The Shock). Just wondering :P

K let me take a look at it.  (must tell you that my comments are sugarcoated - I'm too much of a nice person)

 

First comments: very descriptive, good intro to chapter.  So this isn't your fault, but I think that when Grand wrote Ch.4, the personality of Oswald twisted from unyielding back to the old Oswald who gave Gerald the job.  The ending is great though.  Never could write endings to save my life.

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Err Grand, in your story after Kristi did her job you wrote. 'The young lady sat up room seemingly satisfied.'

 

Where did this room come from? :ph34r:

 

Is it an attempt by Nives to disqualify you and prevent you from revealing the contents of the file#NIVES1897? :ph34r:

Edited June 22, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[GrandExecutioner 1,403]

Err Grand, in your story after Stephanie did her job you wrote. 'The young lady sat up room seemingly satisfied.'

Where did this room come from? :ph34r:

Is it an attempt by Nives to disqualify you and prevent you from revealing the contents of the file#NIVES1897? :ph34r:

You saw nothing.

 

Oh wait. Yes, it was Nives. Blame Nives.

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

You saw nothing.

 

Oh wait. Yes, it was Nives. Blame Nives.

Wait a second, does that mean they are coming for me? :ph34r: Edited June 22, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[pringerfinger 934]

Chapter 5: Sacrifice

 

"Can we go over the plan one more time?" The uncertainty in Gerald's voice was nothing new.

 

Oswald's sigh was audible through Gerald's earpiece. A second later and his uncle's voice crackled through the mic again. "Okay, listen up. Breaking into the office when it's closed during the night is virtually impossible. Which is why we're going to do it in broad daylight. You're going to walk through those front doors. You're going to stroll into the lobby. And you're going to flash a smile at Stephanie behind her desk. She'll slide you a key which you'll pick up without breaking your stride."

 

Perhaps finding out Stephanie was involved in a conspiracy would've swayed Gerald yesterday. But after everything today? Not so much.

 

"Take the lift to the 52nd floor. Use the key to unlock the boss' office. Walk over to the computer and turn it on. Insert the drive I gave to you into the USB port. I'll then be able to get past the encrypted password from here."

 

Gerald was struggling to keep up.

 

"Alexis is in a meeting with the boss on the 3rd floor. He'll stall for time giving you a small window. Kristi will short-circuit the cameras on the 52nd floor replaying the same footage for a short period of time." Oswald paused to take a breath. "Once I get past the encryption, it's all up to you. We need someone physically there to download the file we're after."

 

Suddenly, Oswald lowered his tone as if he was afraid somebody would hear.

 

"I spent years tracking down this file. File #NIVES1897. It contains a record of all the company's activities, clients, targets, everything. We secure the file, we're home free."

 

Gerald closed his eyes and took a deep breath.

 

"This is it, Gerald. We're so close now..."

 

⚔⚔⚔

 

Alexis nervously tapped his fingers on the table waiting for the meeting to start. Only a couple of hours ago he had seen his son for the first time in 18 years. It had taken all his strength not to break down hysterically in front of the boy.

 

No, I need to compose myself. I've got work to do. My family needs me.

 

"Ahh, Mr Elizer. To what do I owe this pleasure?" The boss pulled up a chair and sat down without shaking Alexis' outreached hand. "Unfortunately, my schedule is looking a bit busy so I'm afraid I can only spare you 10 minutes."

 

 

 

⚔⚔⚔

 

Stephanie tapped away on her keyboard not concentrating on her monitor. Her gaze was fixed on the door. Anxiously, she waited. Then the automatic doors slid open and a young man strolled in. He glanced in her direction and smiled. She seemed to be fixated on her screen. Without looking up, Stephanie slid a key across the desk still sporting a neutral expression; the young man swiftly picking it up without breaking his pace.

 

She avoided looking back up.

 

Good luck, Gerald!

 

 

 

⚔⚔⚔

 

In just one of the many security rooms, five men were slumped on their chairs. Heads rolled back. Motionless.

 

A young lady could be seen sitting behind a computer, blue light from a multitude of screens reflecting her sharp features. She was typing rapidly but came to a stop abruptly. She turned her attention to one of the screens in the corner. A young man in an elevator could be seen waiting patiently. His eyes were fixed on the only button lit up. The number 52 was illuminated. After exactly 19 seconds, the doors slid open to reveal his floor and he stepped out disappearing out of view. She hit a button to switch to the camera where he should've appeared. But it only showed the same empty corridor as before. As would the screens in every other security room.

 

Kristi stood up seemingly satisfied. Her job was done.

 

 

 

⚔⚔⚔

 

Gerald wiped a bead of sweat from his eyebrow. His eyes were fixed on the bold text in front of him.

DOWNLOAD in Progress: 87%

 

Boom! The door of the office swung open making Gerald jump up, tipping the chair over.

 

"About time young man!" The first thing Gerald saw when he spun around was the barrel of a gun. Held by none other than his boss, a sneer etched across his face. "I wondered when you would show up."

 

"And we wondered when YOU would show up." Oswald emerged at the door pointing a gun at the boss. "It's over."

 

Alexis came up behind Oswald with his own gun and stood shoulder to shoulder next to his uncle. "You can't shoot us all."

 

The boss' smile was wiped off. It was clear anger had taken over now. Gerald closed his eyes. He knew what was going to happen.

 

The sound of a bullet echoed around the room, immediately followed by another. Gerald didn't know who had fired but to his relief, it was his boss who fell down.

 

But then his uncle sank to his knees- a pool of red visibly growing on his chest...

 

 

 

⚔⚔⚔

 

Gerald kneeled down in front of the gravestone. Tears were streaming down his face and landing as dark spots on the soil. He was crying. For himself. For all the victims killed by his bloodline. But most of all, for his uncle. The man who had sacrificed his life for Gerald's freedom.

 

For his family's freedom.

 

 

 

 

Word Count: 896

Ladies and Gentlemen....Look here ^^^

 

That is all my hopes falling to the ground......

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

I uncovered the whole plot.

 

There's a spy agency running in tanki...

 

That is why Semyon Kirov suddenly left tanki for a job...he had refused to lead the agency...

 

And when the current leaders of the agency came to know that the identities of the spies were in danger of being discovered an emergency was enforced using a code word...The actual secret project 'Energizer'.

 

All files and records were deleted except one... which could neither be opened nor deleted...because a noob searching how to turn the turret in the forum accidentally discovered the file and locked it.

 

...That noob was me...

Edited June 22, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

Ladies and Gentlemen....Look here ^^^

 

That is all my hopes falling to the ground......

Lol me too

 

didn't you say you were gonna dethrone grand?

[pringerfinger 934]

Lol me too

 

didn't you say you were gonna dethrone grand?

That was until I realized my lack of skill in literature....

 

Oh look.....a butterfly.... >.>

[Person_Random 4,991]

That was until I realized my lack of skill in literature....

 

Oh look.....a butterfly.... >.>

Lol

 

Trying to distract me huh?

 

U can change your POV and you might have a better chance...

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Ladies and Gentlemen....Look here ^^^

 

That is all my hopes falling to the ground......

....and a massive bird poop falling on my head.

[Person_Random 4,991]

....and a massive bird poop falling on my head.

Lol

[thethiefofvictory 339]

Am I the only one who doubts Grand will win? He's never disappointed me before, after all  :P

 

Not only that, but I sense there's an unwritten rule that people who contribute one part for CtS cannot win the next part, or at least not first. I've been around since before The Grand Offensive, after all, even if I was a noob back then :p

Edited June 23, 2018 by thethiefofvictory

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Am I the only one who doubts Grand will win? He's never disappointed me before, after all :P

 

Not only that, but I sense there's an unwritten rule that people who contribute one part for CtS cannot win the next part, or at least not first. I've been around since before The Grand Offensive, after all, even if I was a noob back then :p

I feel that if pringerfinger somehow weaved the basic definition of Operation Reboot and how they are going to accomplish it into the story, it would really be a satisfactory conclusion. And who knows he might dethrone grand. :ph34r: Edited June 23, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[pringerfinger 934]

Lol

 

Trying to distract me huh?

 

U can change your POV and you might have a better chance...

I don't have the time anymore :/

[Person_Random 4,991]

I don't have the time anymore :/

There's a few days.  It only takes 5 minutes to change "I" to Gerald and the verb tenses.  Use grammarly after changing the I and copy paste.

[Person_Random 4,991]

Am I the only one who doubts Grand will win? He's never disappointed me before, after all  :P

 

Not only that, but I sense there's an unwritten rule that people who contribute one part for CtS cannot win the next part, or at least not first. I've been around since before The Grand Offensive, after all, even if I was a noob back then :P

So I have a chance??  YES!

 

You do think I will get close to the win, right? :D :P ;)

Edited June 24, 2018 by Person_Random

[thethiefofvictory 339]

So I have a chance??  YES!

 

You do think I will get close to the win, right? :D :P ;)

Well you sure can win, or at least be second :p

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Okay, let me use my crap reasoning skills to determine the results...

 

 

1- You

2- You

3- You

4- You

Consolation:

Everyone else

 

JK

 

1- GrandExecutioner

2- pringerfinger

3- Person_Random

4- thethiefofvictory

Consolation:

P.4.R.K.O.U.R

JAGMAN

 

 

Edited June 24, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

Okay, let me use my crap reasoning skills to determine the results...

 

 

1- You

2- You

3- You

4- You

Consolation:

Everyone else

 

JK

 

1- GrandExecutioner

2- pringerfinger

3- Person_Random

4- thethiefofvictory

Consolation:

P.4.R.K.O.U.R

JAGMAN

 

 

Lol you really think I deserve third?  Actually I got that last time too so yeah.  It's fine.

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Lol you really think I deserve third? Actually I got that last time too so yeah. It's fine.

I told you my skills are crap.

The thing about your story is that if the boss was the leader and killing him would end the conspiracy, why would he just come like hey yo, make me a cup of tea so black that it reminds you of @Momma_Bear ?

Edited June 24, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[thethiefofvictory 339]

I told you my skills are crap.

The thing about your story is that if the boss was the leader and killing him would end the conspiracy, why would he just come like hey yo, make me a cup of tea so black that it reminds you of @Momma_Bear ?

He didn't realize a thing until Alexis revealed the dagger, heh. Not quite a very good conspiracy leader eh? 

 

As for your predictions, are they your personal preferences or a prediction of what Flex and his judges and lawyers, if there are any, will think? I like Person's story, but Grand, as I said before, disappointed me. Too much of the spying and missions and stuff. I don't think he'll be first. 

 

Also Person and Parkour and everybody else, don't double post. If you have something more to say, edit your post to add that. If someone else has already posted in that time, then ok. 

Edited June 24, 2018 by thethiefofvictory

[Best_of_thunder_2015 1,354]

Please Don't ever do a other series like this especially in typing text walls or grammar contests. .-. Just please flexooo, Everyone in this universe isn't a pro @ grammar. 

[thethiefofvictory 339]

Please Don't ever do a other series like this especially in typing text walls or grammar contests. .-. Just please flexooo, Everyone in this universe isn't a pro @ grammar. 

Well there's been four CtS before, one of a different style so I guess there'll be more :d but I'd rather there's more. To each their own, I guess, but yes they should host more contests-that-don't-involve-writing. But don't ignore writing contests.

 

Oh, and that I think should go to Newspaper Suggestions