Contest [Issue 76] Continue The Story - Final Chapter V

[JAGMAN2468 104]

Okay, let me use my crap reasoning skills to determine the results...

 

 

1- You

2- You

3- You

4- You

Consolation:

Everyone else

 

JK

 

1- GrandExecutioner

2- pringerfinger

3- Person_Random

4- thethiefofvictory

Consolation:

P.4.R.K.O.U.R

JAGMAN

 

 

Mine was really that bad... RIP writing skills  :ph34r:

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

He didn't realize a thing until Alexis revealed the dagger, heh. Not quite a very good conspiracy leader eh?

 

As for your predictions, are they your personal preferences or a prediction of what Flex and his judges and lawyers, if there are any, will think? I like Person's story, but Grand, as I said before, disappointed me. Too much of the spying and missions and stuff. I don't think he'll be first.

 

Also Person and Parkour and everybody else, don't double post. If you have something more to say, edit your post to add that. If someone else has already posted in that time, then ok.

What I like about Grand's story is that it takes just a single brain cell which Flexoo's lawyers hopefully have to know what will happen later on in the story and he rather shifts his focus to a more concerning thing- the death of his uncle.

As to pringerfinger's story, the only thing that I can figure out about Operation Reboot is that the boss becomes a zombie and gives Gerald a 'boot' on his posterior there is some kind of 'reboot' in the agency.

Edited June 24, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[thethiefofvictory 339]

What I like about Grand's story is that it takes just a single brain cell which Flexoo's lawyers hopefully have to know what will happen later on in the story and he rather shifts his focus to a more concerning thing- the death of his uncle.

As to persons story, the only thing that I can figure out about Operation Reboot is that the boss becomes a zombie and gives Gerald a 'boot' on his posterior there is some kind of 'reboot' in the agency.

That was @pringerfinger's. Person's was Vengeance. Grand's previous entries, including his two winners, were wonderful. I agree with your points, and Sacrifice was good (it can win first), but disappointing. I expected better from the Grand Executioner of the Thief's Victory. :p

[BlueDragon_tamki 3,204]

 

 

The Rebellion ( Or Not?)

 

 

Gerald couldn't control his emotions and he hugged his father.

"Dad...", he said

"Yes, son?"

"...you smell like asparagus."

"Curse the perfume."

Suddenly someone entered the room, clapping. There was an armed guard behind him. "Family reunion, huh? Well, let me complete it ", he said. His face was covered. Gerald recognised him as the same person who had given him the horrendous tasks.

The person threw away his sunglasses and Gerald heard his dad whisper "Father...". He looked quite like Gerald in his old age. "With a face like that, I too would have to cover myself up. I can't afford to have people throwing eggs at me." Gerald thought.

"Yes, I am Ferris.. it's a shame being a father of such traitors" said his grandfather. He looked around "I see that all the filth in the family blood has collected here."

His eyes fell on Gerald. "After Alexis ran away, I thought that at least fresh guns would continue the family tradition. But they turned out to be even worse.... That's why I like old guns."

The guard handed him a musket. He took out a pouch of gunpowder and filled the barrel. Then he took a bullet and loaded the gun.

"Why doesn't the ball go inside!" he roared.

"Hand me the gun, Dad" Alexis offered. Ferris handed it over and Alexis banged the backside on the floor, and the ball went inside. " Here you go".

"Thanks, now prepare to die!!".

Gerald closed his eyes and bid goodbye to the evil world.

Ferris pulled the trigger and the gun fired... at the wall.

"CURSE THE AIM!" roared Ferris.

"Try again, father" suggested Alexis. Ferris loaded the gun again with the help of Alexis and aimed again.

Gerald again closed his eyes and bid farewell to the evil world. Ferris again pulled the trigger.

A shot was fired and Gerald heard someone groan in pain. He opened his eyes. His grandfather lay there with a gunshot wound on his head.

The gun had misfired.

" What a noob, Ha Ha Ha!" laughed Alexis clutching his stomach while Oswald giggled. Even Gerald could not help but smile.

But the threat was not over. The armed guard pointed his pistol right at Gerald. Gerald closed his eyes for the last time and bid farewell to the evil world in which he had survived two times.

A shot rang out. Gerald opened his eyes to find the guard dead.

"Darn it!!... Why do you keep adding suspense again and again and ending it in such a stupid way?!"

What actually happened was this:

Kristi Elizer stepped in like the heroine of a story and began tickling the guard and the guard, laughing madly, pumped a bullet in his own chest.

"How dare you free yourself! I was going to come as a hero to save you!" groaned Gerald.

"I saved your darn life, kid" snarled Kristi.

"Yeah, THANK YOU!" he barked at her.

"Please stop fighting.", interrupted Oswald looking concerned, "You know what...Ferris never comes alone."

"Of course he brought a guard." said Gerald, pointing at the dead man.

"I meant other than him."

"Yeah, he brings his rusty old musket too", suggested Alexis.

"I mean except his guard, musket, sunglasses, clothes, underpants, EVERYTHING!" shouted Oswald.

At that moment several armed men entered the room.

"Spies", Oswald informed Gerald.

"The game's over!" said the leader.

"The GAME ended June 8th." said Gerald.

"You think you are punny, kid?", replied the leader with a smirk. "...Then embrace your end!"

Oswald was quick to react "Your shoelaces are untied!"

The leader looked down. His shoelaces were actually untied.

"Hold this for a moment, will you?", he threw the rifle towards Kristi.

"Sure" she said. The leader tied his laces. Kristi handed over the gun.

"Thanks", he said and aimed his weapon at her.

"What about we get some fresh air and talk this thing out in the open?" suggested Gerald.

"Ok".

Gerald, Kristi, Oswald and Alexis used the stairs and got out of the basement of Oswald's house and onto the lawn along with the men who then pointed their guns towards the "traitors".

At that moment, many police cars filled the driveway. The officers got out and began arresting the armed men... but not before they had said their favourite phrase "hands up!".

 

Gerald looked around to see everyone smiling.

"This really is a happy family reunion" said Alexis.

"But one of us is dead" pointed out Oswald.

"Can't say I am sad".

Everything looked great for Gerald. The agency would be closed and there would be no one to make him assassinate anyone...

 

The commander of the unit headed towards them. "For the work each of you have done..."

"Would we be getting a nice reward?" asked Gerald, excited.

The commander nodded. "You two...", he pointed at Alexis and Oswald, "..are charged with various counts of murder and you two..", he pointed at Kristi and Gerald, "...are charged with abetment to suicide and conspiring to murder, respectively. Officers please arrest them."

And that's how all four of them ended up happily in jail.

 

 

 

 

 

The End

 

Word count is 0.000000085 X 10^10.

this was so hilarious :lol:

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

I guess you didn't check my edit. I actually realized this while brushing and rushed to save myself and thought I actually did but you beat me to it.

But wasn't it persons story which we were talking about before? And you think his is better than grands?

BTW didn't you see the mistake in the zombie part. (In pringers story the boss never died :p)

[Person_Random 4,991]

Please Don't ever do a other series like this especially in typing text walls or grammar contests. .-. Just please flexooo, Everyone in this universe isn't a pro @ grammar. 

But it helped improve my writing skillz more than I ever learned in 4 years of writing class.  (make that grammar/vocab class)

 

P.S. if you aren't a pro @ grammar, join grammarly here.

Edited June 25, 2018 by Person_Random

[Person_Random 4,991]

I told you my skills are crap.

The thing about your story is that if the boss was the leader and killing him would end the conspiracy, why would he just come like hey yo, make me a cup of tea so black that it reminds you of @Momma_Bear ?

The boss came to ask Oswald where Gerald was and found him there.  And I never really said the boss was the leader of the conspiracy.  Alexis attacked first.  Some parts are meant to be implied, so you did a good job there.

He didn't realize a thing until Alexis revealed the dagger, heh. Not quite a very good conspiracy leader eh? 

 

As for your predictions, are they your personal preferences or a prediction of what Flex and his judges and lawyers, if there are any, will think? I like Person's story, but Grand, as I said before, disappointed me. Too much of the spying and missions and stuff. I don't think he'll be first. 

 

Also Person and Parkour and everybody else, don't double post. If you have something more to say, edit your post to add that. If someone else has already posted in that time, then ok. 

Yeah sorry.  I should stop doing that.

[Person_Random 4,991]

That was @pringerfinger's. Person's was Vengeance. Grand's previous entries, including his two winners, were wonderful. I agree with your points, and Sacrifice was good (it can win first), but disappointing. I expected better from the Grand Executioner of the Thief's Victory. :P

So I might win?  Nice to know.  Sacrifice was really good tho...  It's a pretty competitive piece at my level though it'd be dq'd bc no violence rule @ my writing class.

 

P.S. I did it again.  Sorry.

Edited June 25, 2018 by Person_Random

[Person_Random 4,991]

I guess you didn't check my edit. I actually realized this while brushing and rushed to save myself and thought I actually did but you beat me to it.

But wasn't it persons story which we were talking about before? And you think his is better than grands?

BTW didn't you see the mistake in the zombie part. (In pringers story the boss never died :P)

You really think I can face grand? Idk about that.

 

P.P.S.  I should use the multiquote button more.

Edited June 25, 2018 by Person_Random

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

I have a question- Wasn't Alexis on the run and hiding from the company?

Because in your story, The boss doesn't care a bit that a traitor is in front of him and in Grand's, is pleased to see Alexis.

 

this was so hilarious :lol:

At least someone appreciated my entry. :D Edited June 25, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

I have a question- Wasn't Alexis on the run and hiding from the company?

Because in your story, The boss doesn't care a bit that a traitor is in front of him and in Grand's, is pleased to see Alexis.

Yeah, pleased to see him to kill him ofc.  If they are pleased to see a traitor, they are probably aiming to harm.  it is implicit.

Edited June 25, 2018 by Person_Random

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Yeah, pleased to see him to kill him ofc. If they are pleased to see a traitor, they are probably aiming to harm. it is implicit.

Lol, really? Confronting them alone? Didn't expect that from Grand!

Even if they were going to harm him why not just do it straight? That's really stupid!

Edited June 25, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

people like to be implicit.  higher-caliber stories have to make you imply things too...

 

they can't tell you the obvious.

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

people like to be implicit. higher-caliber stories have to make you imply things too...

 

they can't tell you the obvious.

Ok, now I understand. When they say they are cooking up a story, they aren't just making simple boiled vegetables, they are making a delicious Italian salad. I actually went to Italy once and had salad two times. It was crap. Who puts brinjals in a darn salad! Edited June 25, 2018 by P.4.R.K.O.U.R

[Person_Random 4,991]

Yes.  Stories are meant to be like this. Or else English teachers wouldn't make you read books!

 

That's why essays are so hard.  Analyzing books...

[thethiefofvictory 339]

So, Person, you say you won't double post. That very post is a double, i.e you post after your own. THEN, you post twice more. So quadruple post. Claps. 

 

I'm surprised Conqueror hasn't entered yet. Let's hope he's too busy adding the final touches to his Writing Contest guide to enter here, we could all do with less competition :p

[Magical.Tanki04 4]

So, Person, you say you won't double post. That very post is a double, i.e you post after your own. THEN, you post twice more. So quadruple post. Claps. 

 

I'm surprised Conqueror hasn't entered yet. Let's hope he's too busy adding the final touches to his Writing Contest guide to enter here, we could all do with less competition :p

 

 

Too bad I didn't have time to finish my guide and an entry for this.. would've been fun.

 

I also wanted to ask what I could've improved in my story (The Shock). Just wondering :p

Conqueror isn't entering right?

[C.O.N.Q.U.E.R.O.R 3,845]

Nah... first off I suck at conclusions, second I didn't have time to do both the Guide and this, third, I came over with some type of stomach virus and wouldn't feel comfortable writing an essay rather than sleeping.

 

 

Looks like I'm getting 'famous' in the writing section now though :ph34r:

Edited June 26, 2018 by C.O.N.Q.U.E.R.O.R

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Nah... first off I suck at conclusions, second I didn't have time to do both the Guide and this, third, I came over with some type of stomach virus and wouldn't feel comfortable writing an essay rather than sleeping.

 

 

Looks like I'm getting 'famous' in the writing section now though :ph34r:

The first thing in your guide should be don't get sick with a stomach virus.

The second thing may be about bribing Flexoo's lawyers.

:ph34r:

[Person_Random 4,991]

So, Person, you say you won't double post. That very post is a double, i.e you post after your own. THEN, you post twice more. So quadruple post. Claps. 

 

I'm surprised Conqueror hasn't entered yet. Let's hope he's too busy adding the final touches to his Writing Contest guide to enter here, we could all do with less competition :P

Lol sorry.

[Person_Random 4,991]

K

[thethiefofvictory 339]

Oh, wow, since when did CtS become a place for advertisement of forum games?! 

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Oh, wow, since when did CtS become a place for advertisement of forum games?!

Since June 27, 2018 4:45

[Flexoo 6,980]

:excl:  Announcement  :excl: 

 

Due to the low number of entries, the contest has been prolonged by another month. New deadline for the contest is 27th July, 2018.

[P.4.R.K.O.U.R 329]

Wait what?!! You just shattered my goal of getting the consolation prize.