A Full Circle

[Tyranny 29]

The meaning of life, through an infant’s eyes,

Is filled with curiosity and cries.

Everyday is a new adventure,

Where only the brave dear venture.

 

 

The meaning of life, through a teen’s eyes,

is full of choices and of lies.

To choose among so many roads,

Their minds feel ready to explode.

 

 

The meaning of life, through an adult’s eyes,

Shows much remorse and good-byes.

To finally calm and think it over,

Realizing life is not actually meager.

 

 

Understanding that life is not about playing,

But truly about learning.

Lying in bed resting,

Thinking of life’s meaning.

 

 

To live in this era,

With technology all the better.

How lucky it has been!

How life was not that mean!

 

 

To live in this time,

with improved lifestyles and fewer crimes.

Upon the last destination,

Finally resting with satisfaction.

 

-by Tyranny-

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Article approved.

 

An interesting poem that succinctly sums up one's life. The first 3 stanzas are great in terms of flow and rhyme, but after that it starts to become somewhat uneven, with vague half rhymes and hugely varying line lengths.

 

I would recommend trying a bit more to stick to a rhyme/syllable scheme, as it flows better and makes it easier to read.

 

Edits:

A few words added, removed, or slightly changed to help flow.

Your grammar is almost perfect, I added just one full stop near the beginning, otherwise it was perfect.

[Cpt.JackHammer 1,473]

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