Darkness [Part 2]

[Lose 881]

I stood, horrified at what the voice just said. Then a huge crash came out of nowhere; I ducked and pulled Ethan down as a huge piece of stone flew past at what must had been sixty miles per hour, right where our faces were a second ago. We got up to our feet and ran like we never ran before. No matter where we ran, we always seemed to run right in front of the danger. It was a while before I realized the ground around us for about ten feet was illuminated. 

 

We're in a spotlight, I thought darkly, the spotlight on a horrific show, and we're the main event.

 

We would run in a certain direction, just to see a wall of spikes coming straight at us. We would run the opposite way to see a huge tower falling, threatening to crush us. Eventually we got to the point of almost collapsing. Gasping for breath, I looked at Ethan. He looked like he was about to puke. Actually, it seemed like he had already puked multiple times. He was so pale that he looked like something from a black and white movie. We caught each others eye, and we nodded. We had to keep moving.

 

We started sprinting again, nowhere in particular. Eventually I noticed that the attacks were getting more frequent and also more dangerous. Twice we had to jump holes up to 15 feet wide, praying we would make it. I was running for about 15 minutes before I realized something was wrong. I looked around.

 

Where was Ethan?.

 

I instantly turned and ran the way I just came from. I ran for who knows how long. Then I heard something that made my heart stop for a good 5 seconds.

 

A scream, very far away.

 

But I knew exactly who it was.

 

I bolted towards the noise, jumping across huge holes and running under bridges as they collapsed. I kept on running as Ethan kept on screaming in the distance, not getting louder but yet not getting softer. I ran faster and faster until I tripped over something.

 

I got up, not wanting to find out what it was but curious at the same time. Any blood that was still in my face instantly disappeared. It was Ethan, lying on his stomach. I bent down to roll him over to see if he's hurt. There, on his chest, was a note.

 

Loyalty can mean many things. I didn't know letting them die was one of them.

 

I looked at the body. It was plastic.

 

It's a fake.

 

I realized too late it was a trap. I saw a huge explosion, a huge mass of rock, and nothing more. 

[kaisdf 3,320]

Article approved.

 

Wow. Firstly, compared to part 1, this is a huge improvement. Everything that needed improving in that piece has been perfected in this. I love the style, great flow, all of it.

 

Rarely does a story actually get me on the edge of my seat wanting to read more, but this did, and in few words as well. Absolutely can't wait for Part 3!

 

Also, very accurate, I had to make very few changes - far fewer than the last piece.

 

Edits:

• A couple of words changed to improve flow, very little in total

[thethiefofvictory 339]

I agree with kais - great story, way better than last time!

[Lose 881]

Article approved.

 

Wow. Firstly, compared to part 1, this is a huge improvement. Everything that needed improving in that piece has been perfected in this. I love the style, great flow, all of it.

 

Rarely does a story actually get me on the edge of my seat wanting to read more, but this did, and in few words as well. Absolutely can't wait for Part 3!

 

Also, very accurate, I had to make very few changes - far fewer than the last piece.

 

Edits:

• A couple of words changed to improve flow, very little in total

 

I agree with kais - great story, way better than last time!

thank you both! im glad that im improving

[TankiNoob2000 231]

What a story! Very well written ;)

[Person_Random 4,991]

Great Job!

[Lose 881]

What a story! Very well written ;)

 

Great Job!

thank you!

[Lose 881]

im starting to write 999. [Part 3], but im completely out of ideas right now. might end it at part 4 or 5 or just shelve it until later. but im still gonna try for part 3

[Lose 881]

Posted! Got inspiration for it when i started writing, just popped into my head, dont know how it happened.

Edited December 21, 2018 by Lose

[Lose 881]

I plan to be writing Darkness [Part 3] today, stay tuned m8s :D

[Person_Random 4,991]

Yay!  I can't wait!

[Lose 881]

Even though I have no idea what to do.... I'll write it probably in a few hours 

[Person_Random 4,991]

Even though I have no idea what to do.... I'll write it probably in a few hours 

Great idea.  I should do that more.  On a side note, I was wondering if you would like the Untreated Series, a teenage romance.  (Please no be hard this is first time trying add feelings in a story OoF me)

[Lose 881]

Great idea.  I should do that more.  On a side note, I was wondering if you would like the Untreated Series, a teenage romance.  (Please no be hard this is first time trying add feelings in a story OoF me)

i think i would like it a lot, please start or continue this series

[Lose 881]

hit a slight bump... i wrote about 1 paragraph then my mind went blank but itll be written within an hour now
Posted it, something I should have done 15 or 16 days ago... sorry for saying I'll write it then proceeding to do the opposite.