Slender Man Returns: Part 5

[TankiNoob2000 231]

I turned around like a cheetah but the only shadow I found was Jonathan stretching and waking up. I shook my head and told him, "Don't scare me like that again!" All John replied with was, "Sorry bro." I got my phone from the counter and started to play a game I had downloaded. I already knew that Slender Man was nearby, so I told John to watch out for him if he came. He nodded and he asked me, "You want McDonald's for lunch?" I responded, "Oh heck yeah!" He told me that he would leave and he would be back no later than 20 minutes. It was just me in the room now.

 

The doctors came in and told me that they were able to move my hip surgery up to today. I quickly took the chance and was taken to the surgery room. I was knocked out with some sort of anaesthetic. The surgeons started to operate on my hip and I heard the sound of the equipment going on. I was asleep long enough and eventually I woke up when the knock out effect was over. The surgeons said that my hip was successfully repaired and the only thing that I had to worry about now was my foot. Delighted, I was proud because I thought that I had to endure hip and foot pain for 2 weeks. Now all I had to worry about was the foot pain. I got my cast and crutches and the doctors told me it would take about 5 weeks to recover. I managed to walk my way out of the hospital and I saw Johnathan the last minute. He was surprised and asked," How long until your foot heals?" I replied with 5 weeks and he finally gave me my food and left but not before we exchanged phone numbers.

 

I was finally back home and I took out the pizza I ordered before I ate my McDonald's. I ate a slice and then I had my food that John gave me. I admitted that he was one of the best people I have ever met. I played WWE 2k19 and streamed on my Halo channel. I got a 7 hour stream in but I realized that the time was already close to midnight. At this point I was exhausted so I turned off my console and went to sleep.

 

I woke up at 4 AM to hear a sound saying, "Open the door!" I went to my window but I didn't see anyone. However, the sound of the light switch got me in trouble again and there was the man without a face. I tried attacking him with my crutch but as usual he teleported away. I called John and told him, "He's back again." He hung up and he realized that I gave him a house key to my house just in case someone broke in. My leg was already injured but Slender Man tried to injure it once more. He started stabbing my broken foot and I had to scream in pain. Then Slender Man teleported but not before taking me with him. When John went to my room, it was too late since I was gone. He saw my phone so I had no chance of notifying him. I was thought to never be seen again and there were posters of me missing everywhere. 

 

As the poll says, should I continue the series or conclude it? Thank you all for your support.

 

-TN2K

[kaisdf 3,320]

Article approved.

 

Great piece, loving the action in it! /as for continuing the series, up to you, but I know I want to see more...

 

Try and use the passive less; i.e. instead of "I was taken by the doctors to...", it would be better to say, "The doctors took me to...".

 

You need a space between punctuation and speech marks. It should be like this, ", not,".

 

Edits:

• Spaces added between punctuation and speech marks
  
• Words changed to improve flow
  

[TankiNoob2000 231]

Thanks man;)

Edited March 23, 2019 by TankiNoob2000

[TankiNoob2000 231]

I'll try to get part 6 in

[Person_Random 4,991]

Definitely continue.  There's still a lot to find out about the plot!