A Battle of Three Firebirds

[Towns 574]

What a lovely day. The sun is shining, the flowers are blooming. However, I'm not going to go outside. Instead, I'm going to play some Tanki Online. This is the year 2042, we have managed a way to solve climate change - yes, it's not too hot, and not too cold. The climate has never been this good since the late 1700s. I am a Youtuber with over 240,000 subscribers. I play Tanki and also another game called Geometry Dash. I invite my subscribers to Tanki Online through a referral link, and I have now got almost all my equipment at Mk9 (Mk8 is a new modification of equipment that is only accessible to Legend players). What's this? A friend wants me to join a Polygon DM match? I accept the invite, knowing that I have Firebird and Hornet, now I'm ready to grind some experience for Legend 100 (I'm Legend 98 and I rank up a Legend rank every five days). 

 

I am Towns, a player who also the Youtuber with over 240,000 subscribers. After my Tanki client finished loading into the battle, I see that there are no supplies, no overdrives and no bonus boxes. I'm looking for my friends Zekrom and Im_a_tanki_master to kill. So I scout the area knowing that they are probably looking for me too, and, after 5 minutes of searching, I start to take damage. Rapidly. I have found my friend Zekrom. He is going to kill me if I don't do something very soon. So, I turn my turret and start damaging him, knowing that I'm going to be dying regardless of whatever happens because my tank is almost completely red with Firebird's signature afterburn effect. So, I run and damage him from a range that he can't damage me, but I can damage him. But, I'm only dealing minimum damage, and I need to deal maximum damage to kill him. I get closer to him and he starts to rapidly damage me again. Although he just killed me, my 6-second afterburn is enough to deal 600 damage per second in afterburn. I spawn right next to my friend, Im_a_tanki_master. I start to damage him, but he seems to be killing me 50% faster than usual. He must be using... Incendiary Mix! Man, that alteration is annoying, and it gives me a much bigger headache than Gauss does, and boy, does Gauss give me a huge headache. I have realized that four minutes have passed and this battle goes on for 20 minutes, which is a shorter time than it takes me to catch 20 golds.

 

After twelve minutes of pure pain and suffering from two Firebirds attacking me, I hear something. It sounds like... A siren! Yes! A gold box is dropping right now! I press and hold E until I can't any more, searching for the gold. It's on the other side of the map, great. Also, Zekrom and Im_a_tanki_master are doing an intense battle at the gold drop zone. When the gold is a split second away from hitting Zekrom's tank, they both die. The gold is free for me to take. I haven't realized that the battle fund is at 3,090 crystals and that I'm in first place with 619 battle score, with Zekrom and Im_a_tanki_master having 338 and 293 battle score respectively. It worked out to be 7 crystals in the fund for every kill that a player gets, which is pretty impressive. But I remember something. It's x2 battle funds in ALL battles. I end up getting 2,042 crystals (and a gold box), which is funny because it's the year 2042. Zekrom ends up getting 1,115 crystals and Im_a_tanki_master gets 1,934 crystals. 

 

Note: Zekrom and Im_a_tanki_master are my alternate accounts, which gives me permission to use their usernames in these stories all I want. Question: How high was the battle fund at the time the battle finished? And why did Im_a_tanki_master get 1,934 crystals instead of 967 crystals? Let me know down in the comments below!

[Person_Random 4,991]

Approved.

 

Excellent story, I enjoy the description and the light-hearted enjoyment of a Firebird match in TO, especially its relatability. You describe the Firebird-to-Firebird interactions perfectly. I'm thinking that you can fix your sentence flow a bit because it felt choppy with the "I... I... I..." structure, so you can try to vary up your sentences with different sentence styles (simple, complex, compound, sentence starts) in future pieces. Overall, great work; I'm very excited for more content from you! 

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• Some grammar fixes
• Minor phrasing changes to improve flow

 

[Towns 574]

I feel like this thread is dead? Any feedback? (Apart from you, Random )

Edited March 5, 2020 by Towns

[Sacrifice 2,278]

I have read the story and it seems like a really nice price of writing. However you could try adding pictures and giving a heading to it using different color markers. It would add to the presentation. A picture of a gold box at the end would have been a sufficient addition too. Your writing is good and I would now recommend you to concentrate on presentation as well. Overall it is a very good effort and I am really excited for your next article. Goodluck! 

[Towns 574]

On 3/6/2020 at 10:49 PM, Sacrifice said:

I have read the story and it seems like a really nice price of writing. However you could try adding pictures and giving a heading to it using different color markers. It would add to the presentation. A picture of a gold box at the end would have been a sufficient addition too. Your writing is good and I would now recommend you to concentrate on presentation as well. Overall it is a very good effort and I am really excited for your next article. Goodluck! 

Thanks for your feedback! I will consider adding images (and colored text) into my new AWS articles in the future!