T-H-E G-H-O-S-T Story

[AwesomeBlake33712 13]

Make it in paragraphs, then it will be fine I hate a WOW - Wall of Words

[P3DRo0o 75]

well... was it kunger???

[Deathsfire 10]

A long time ago' date=' there was once a man who traveled to San Francisco and he needed to stay the night at a hotel. Upon registering, the Lady told him to not even go near the door that was next to his room. So after hearing that, he walked back to his room and slept. The man woke up the next morning and walked past the mysterious room and his curiosity got the best of him, he peeked inside from the little slit at the bottom of the door. He saw what resembled a white feminine figure and suddenly the figure turned around and ran into a blind spot that the slit under the door couldn't contain in it's view. That night, after having finished dinner, he walked back up to his room and yet again, decided to peek under the door and not learning his lesson. This time however, it seemed that the slit was blocked by something red, the man thought it was probably a carpet or a rug and felt bad for having intruded on her privacy. The next morning, the man went to return the card for the room and asked the lady who it was in the room next to his, the lady understands that the man has looked inside and decides to tell him. She begins, "That room contains the ghost of a woman who had hanged herself, she haunts that room because it was where her boyfriend dumped her, her whole body is pale white but except for her eyes, which are red".[/quote']

 

this isnt your story (it isnt your topic)

 

but pretty good story

lol seriously? Wtf? You need to mind your own business, i post it where ever i want.

 

what i say i still said it was a good story man you dont need to get all defencefull just read it closer

[AwesomeBlake33712 13]

well... was it kunger???

Nope.

[Ranger7 75]

Uuum, Fort Knox III?

[AwesomeBlake33712 13]

Think of the story how it describes it... and it is a popular map...

[P3DRo0o 75]

silence??? polygon???? im just pointing out popular maps ... lool

[r_aleksas20 0]

Awesome story!

[awkstremer 1]

Tribute

[jordanrusson 3]

AWesome story, once again

[AwesomeBlake33712 13]

Not tribute. Not polygon of course because you can only DM there :P

[Delta_88 17]

Uuum' date=' Fort Knox III?[/quote']

That's a real fort ya know

It is used to hold most of the US's gold supply

[Delta_88 17]

Once upon a time I was in a battle. I was by myself, no one on the enemy team. It started loading, then I had grey screen, then I spawned, and BOOM I instantly died. It said " destroyed AwesomeBlake33712" and I got freaked out...

 

then I went into his base, took his flag, and drove to my base. Just at the last milli second I was going to capture it, BOOM again and it said the same thing... then my flag got taken, I saw the ghost tank, it was a M3 tank that looked a bit like a hornet, and a gun the looked like smokey. Then I realised it was a Smokey XT!! And his tank, was a tanki 2.0 version of hornet M3!!! he was going super fast. I shot my thunder at him, but it just hit the wall behind him. Then I went and grabbed my ricochet, he had 44 flags now :O

 

I shot him as he was taking our 45th flag, but the bullets went straight through him and bounced off the wall and hit me. Then, he turned, and BOOM for somehow his smokey XT killed me in one shot! He wasn't using any Double Powers, Then I realised he had this big fan on the back of his smokey XT, I went up close, then he magically turned invisible! the this black fire came somewhere from behind me and it did about half of my health each shot. (I used Hornet M2) and then this message came on my screen saying "GHOST DETECTED!" and I freaked out then I saw this gun which looked like a cannon perched up on the edge cliff.

A huge black bolder came and shot me and kill me in one shot. Then he turned into his ghost tank again and zoomed around and got 2 more flags so now he is on 47 - 0 Then I decided to go take his flag from the other side of the battle. Soon as I took it, BOOM he got me again then he captured my flag again. Then he zoomed down with his partually visible, but unhurtable tank and took my flag again. I use nitros but then I saw him go through the cliff then bowwwwnnnnnn he captured again! Then I took his flag, ran away with it, and drove backwards and actually I got the first flag! and guess how much points I got? 999. A huge chunk of my XP bar got filled. Then I though of a brilliant idea! I placed a mine near our flag but unfortunately, the ghost tank just drove right over it.. -_- and took our flag. I drugged and drove desperately to save the last flag! I took it then as I jumped off the cliff, I landed near the ditch, but not in it, He shot me.

 

He hit the very back of my tank causing me to do a front flip. Then I drove passed the walls, skidded around the corner, and went passed the buildings into safety, but I was less than a centermeter from capturing, then BOOM again he got me. He took our flag, zoomed over, through the cliff, and captured. Then it say game over. But somehow, his reward was -3145 and my reward was 2818!!!

 

Try to guess which map it was.

Temple?

[AwesomeBlake33714 2]

how long does it take???

S I L E N C E

[cablaz 32]

dude there are alot of 10vs10 maps, you expect us to guess them all? In your 'Story' you dont describe any map features that stand out.

And your the one losing patience?!

Thats just stupid. your story is ok but the setting could be on the sun for all we know.

 

Your story - All about your actions and the backround and the action thats going on. if a nub read this that doesnt play tanki he could think there are only 2 players in the map (there maybe or may not)

You start off with "Once Upon a time" Great! Then you jump into verbs and action, giving the readers no setting and backround at all.

[Deathsfire 10]

dude there are alot of 10vs10 maps, you expect us to guess them all? In your 'Story' you dont describe any map features that stand out.

And your the one losing patience?!

Thats just stupid. your story is ok but the setting could be on the sun for all we know.

 

Your story - All about your actions and the backround and the action thats going on. if a nub read this that doesnt play tanki he could think there are only 2 players in the map (there maybe or may not)

You start off with "Once Upon a time" Great! Then you jump into verbs and action, giving the readers no setting and backround at all.

 

 

chill bro when i did my first story no one said it was bad and said it was good but not all the people are the same i know your helping but ease up a bit he will soon gain story writing experience (over time in thats case)

[jordanrusson 3]

I think hes pretty gud already, but yes, there is room for improvement.

[P3DRo0o 75]

how long does it take???

S I L E N C E

 

i said silence!

[P3DRo0o 75]

silence??? polygon???? im just pointing out popular maps ... lool

 

see