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(Story) The Dreamer of champion Paint Part 4


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Part 4

The Gold Box

 

There he was, heading for The Gold Box. He was almost there until BullyTank came. He had Titan m3 and Railgun m3.BullyTank said " That's my fuggin gold box pipsqueak". He wanted to know what it did, but then he figured out that it will grant him 100 crystals. Just by looking at what was written and showed on it, he knew, but he was struck with fear from BullyTank. He wasn't gonna give up, he wanted The Gold Box, so he wasn't gonna give up. He charged for the gold box. BullyTank picked him up and threw him. He was destroyed. BullyTank took the gold box. He was upset, so he left the battle. He still had his dignity but no hope for catching the gold box

 

Part 5

Pit Survival

 

~RManJeta

 

Continued From:

Part 3 http://forum.tankionline.com/posts/list/151130.page

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The story is good, but you must add the new parts to the old through the Edit button; you are unfortunately creating flood by making many threads for your story.

 

It is easier to simply press Edit and add onto your story, and it would save a lot of grief :)

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ugh no please no! not a 5th part! Seriously dude, this is incredibly dull.

 

"He wasn't gonna give up, he wanted The Gold Box, so he wasn't gonna give up." <--- -.- are you kidding me?

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Not reading it, No offense, Pro tips:

 

Have a recap of what happened in the last one.

If you're going to make a separate thread for each then.

  • Make them at least a couple of paragrahs with 5-6 lines each.

  • Have a hyperlink to every single one of the previous parts.

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The story is good, but you must add the new parts to the old through the Edit button; you are unfortunately creating flood by making many threads for your story.

 

It is easier to simply press Edit and add onto your story, and it would save a lot of grief :)

 

Unfortunately, I'm not making more because of bad comments but thanks for the information :( :( :(

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