[Story] Immune (Chapter 11 + Chapter 12)

[Kuhaku 87]

Hello, I_Am_Unkown here, and I'll be posting the next two chapters as well as what we can reveal so far #3.

 

Want to read the story from the beginning?

Prologue + Chapter 1: http://en.tankiforum.com/index.php?showtopic=353453

Chapter 2 + Chapter 3:http://en.tankiforum.com/index.php?showtopic=353500

Chapter 4 + Chapter 5: http://en.tankiforum.com/index.php?showtopic=353669

Chatper 6 + Chapter 7: http://en.tankiforum.com/index.php?showtopic=353823

Chapter 8 + Chapter 9 + Chapter 10: http://en.tankiforum.com/index.php?showtopic=354229

 

 

Chapter 11

 

And so, us rebels (we thought ourselves as such) traveled north for two days. Hailey picked a fine horse, named Citrus and the farmer rode his horse, named Saphira. It took us nearly 2 and a half days to reach the edge of the Endless forest. Along the way, we stopped by Voracious, in which we picked up some much needed supplies as well as watered our horses. We stayed the night, and heard more news about the plague. It had already spread to the Village of Temore. We decided that it was best if we waited the plague out in the bunker.

 

When we reached the edge of the Endless Forest, it took us six more hours to get to the actual bunker itself. The farmer and I had hidden it deep in the forest so that nobody could find it. In addition to this, we did it so that we could still have a fire without anybody seeing the smoke.

 

“Wow, what a week”, Hailey said. “I hope my parents bodies were buried so I might see them in the future”.

 

“I’m sure they will receive spectacular burials from the nobles”, I said reassuringly.”Even though your father might've been unfair to some, he still brought our kingdom out of poverty”.

 

“I agree”, the farmer said.”Your father saved this kingdom in my opinion. He was forced to heavily tax certain people to keep others happy, but if it wasn't for the drastic measures he took, who knows? This kingdom might’ve been conquered".

 

“We’re almost there Hailey, once we get through this bushy area, we should be able to see the bunker”, I informed her.

 

“Wow, it is big”, Hailey gasped, once she saw it. “Almost twice as large as the house we left behind”.

 

“Took us nearly five years to finish”, the farmer said. “I figured that somewhere along the way, some sort of large disaster would happen that would cause us to flee my house. Good thing I finished it in time, or else who knows? We might have all been killed by the plague”.

 

We entered the house. There was no front gate or anything. Instead, we entered through a hatch located at the top. It was built so that you couldn’t see the entire thing, but instead only saw a small portion of it. In order to see the entire building, you would need to go underground, where most of the house was located.

 

“The farmer and I already have our own rooms. I’ll show you to the guest room, or rather, the nicest one”, I said.

 

“Give her the one closest to the porch, that way she'll have some fresh air”, the farmer said.

 

“Good idea, seeing that she likes to read, sunlight might be good for her”, I said.

 

“Oh, but I didn’t bring any books, except the one you gave me on the Yusvengal weapons”, Hailey replied.

 

“Well, wait until you see the library, takes up almost a half of the common room”, I spoke, smugly.

 

“We should give this place a name”, the farmer said,”seeing that we’ll be living here until the plague dies down. That could very well be the rest of our lives”.

 

“Well, I was thinking about the Ghost”, Hailey said.

 

“I like that name, seeing as nobody has ever seen this bunker except the three of us”, I said.

 

“Then it’s settled”, the farmer said,”We will now call this bunker, the Ghost”.

 

What we can reveal so far.....

 

 

Chapter 12

 

“So Hailey, did you finish reading the book on the Yusvengal weapons?”, I asked.

 

“Sure did. It was really complicated and long so I’ll do my best to sum it up”, Hailey said. “Yusvengal weapons are basically weapons that are powered by special crystals, called Vengal crystals. These crystals are incredibly rare and only enough were found to create 25 Yusvengal weapons. There was a great war about 350 years ago that caused many to be lost.

 

And by the looks of things, it seems that this Commander Sarinthious stole these weapons from the castle’s armory. Well I guess that ‘stole’ isn’t the right word, he just took them as he is the Commander of the army.

 

These Vengal crystals contain an unlimited amount of power, which causes them to be incredibly dangerous. Once upon a time, a great castle had stood to contain them, but a Vengal crystal had completely destroyed it.

 

In the end, an inventor figured out a way to contain a Vengal crystal’s power in the form of a weapon. But because of the war, only 9 remain. And I guess the castle has 4 of these, and we stole 2 of them. We have the bow and the sword, "Dark Vortex" and "White Light", but the castle also has a shield that can shoot arrows similar to "White Light". There is also a helmet that can blind opponents as well as boost the user's speed and power. The shield is called "Neva Cross", and the helmet is called "Citru". I don’t think Commander Sarinthious had these on display because he was worried that someone would steal them, as they are much more powerful than Dark Vortex and White Light.

 

The other 5 Yusvengal weapons were hidden in an underground cave and nobody knows where the cave is except for a handful of people. And that’s all the book talked about.”

 

“Thank you very much for informing us”, the farmer said, stroking his beard,”If we find the other 5 Yusvengal weapons, we might have a chance at reclaiming Castle Ebro”.

 

“Well, what do we do with the two weapons we have?”, I asked.

 

“Well, I was thinking about giving them to you and Hailey”, the farmer said.

“What? No, you should take the sword, and well, I guess Hailey should use "White Light" as she does know how to use the bow. But the sword, I can’t, I’m just not good enough”, I said.

 

“No, you will, I’m too old too fight, I’ll have to teach you, as I used to fight in the army. I have some wooden swords that you can use to train. And Hailey?”, the farmer asked.

 

“Yes, I’ll use "White Light", but I will need a lot of training to get better, I only know how to shoot small animals, not large moving objects with armor on”.

 

“I agree, but I also think that you should learn how to fight with a sword as well. Not as well as Jonathan of course, but just in case that you need to defend yourself at close combat.”

 

“I guess so”, Hailey said.”In that case I think I’ll start practicing with the wooden sword”.

 

“Jonathan, why don’t you take her through the basics”, the farmer said. ”After that, I’ll walk help teach you some more advanced moves”.

 

I started wondering what would happen once the plague died down. Would we return to our house near the village, would there even be a village? “What will happen once the plague dies down”, I asked.

 

“We can’t go back until we know for sure that the plague has died down. Until then, once a month we’ll send either Hailey or you to see what has become of Castle Ebro and its surroundings”, the farmer said. “Until then, Hailey will do her best to hunt some meat, and we’ll do what we can with the vegetation growing and the meat we stored”.

 

“In fact”, Hailey said,”I think I’ll go hunting right now, while you and Jonathan rest. I’m really anxious to go back to hunting as I haven’t gone hunting for a while now”.

“Sounds good, Jonathan. Why don’t you give Hailey "White Light" so she can try hunting with it, we’ll need you to be able to hit targets from long distances if we want to even have a chance at defeating Commander Sarinthious. In the meantime, we'd better get some rest”, the farmer said.

 

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As usual, please comment below any if you have any thoughts or suggestions. A special thank you to all my readers who have been faithfully supporting me the whole way. Thanks!

Edited April 9, 2017 by Kuhaku

[Crip 4,735]

Approved.

 

 

Edits.

- Punctuation errors (remember that when a speaker finishes a sentence one must end it correctly - example: "We must flee!" said the Farmer. "No chance of saving Hailey now!"

- "They're" is "They are".

- "There" rather than "Their".

- Few typos (nobles rather than nobels).

- Rephrased a sentence.

 

Interesting. I actually like the fantasy-feel to the story, but try and use synonyms and possibly more description. Remember to try and alternate your word usage (rather than using "hunting" three times in the same sentence). Also, why would you rescue Hailey only then to send her back to scout out the place she escaped from?

 

Keep going though. Looking forward to the following chapters!

[Penguin40 1,714]

Nice job! Also, congrats on 400th topic here! XD

 

 

^he'd bring Hailey back cause, well, their objective really is to save Hailey and later enthrone it, as far as I understand... and their new objectice now is to kill that commander :p

[Crip 4,735]

^he'd bring Hailey back cause, well, their objective really is to save Hailey and later enthrone it, as far as I understand... and their new objectice now is to kill that commander :P

 

Until then, once a month we’ll send either Hailey or you to see what has become of Castle Ebro and its surroundings”,

I'm talking about this sentence. Why send Hailey (alone) back to the place where she escaped from?

 

[Penguin40 1,714]

I'm talking about this sentence. Why send Hailey (alone) back to the place where she escaped from?

Ahh, I see. Silly move to do though, but I already have reasons running around in my mind, not gonna talk :P

[Kuhaku 87]

When I said

"Until then, once a month we’ll send either Hailey or you to see what has become of Castle Ebro and its surroundings”,

 

I meant that a month after they arrived at the Ghost, they would send either Jonathan or Hailey to see if the plague had died down. A month after, the search for Hailey would probably be over as the government/Commander Sarinthious would have more important matters on their hands, such as the plague.