Why do who what is a weird sentence, you could use it for alliteration. So anyways, what is a good story in your opinion?

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im actually happy ik a few of those maps but there's no way id ever win

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I pull a thinking face and say I'm thinking when am actually bored since I don't want to talk to people. I have to wear a headset. P.S. on that topic I also think that people can hear outside my headset. There's a lot more I'll update it as I go. Also, I think you made a typo. (I like to catch grammar errors more)

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Maybe it will be a little more enjoyable in comfortable pUrPLe CoMIc sAnS

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just try to make the phrases similar length, I never really learned either

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I really enjoyed this story. It was one I couldn't stop reading. You have a strong writing base, so I'm not going to do too much critic. While you have a steady hold on sentence starts, but I would like it if you spread your "I did this..." style sentences farther apart, as they are in chunks. (Unless you meant to reiterate that for effect). Adding on to what Given said, you don't need to state that you used supplies. Instead, you could write "putting on a burst of speed" and most readers will assume you've put on a speed boost. And of course, if you do have time, here are a couple of things I'd suggest just for fun. 1. type the actual words in chat and then screen them, crop them and show them for effect. 2. If you capture a flag or drop golds, etc, then you could change the font accordingly (green is good, yellow bad, orange gold, just for quick ref).

As you may not know, I do critic a lot of articles, but for this one, maybe I'll wait a year or two. This is also because one of my hands is stuck to the mouse while I decided to eat a jelly sandwich while reading to procrastinate studying vocab.

Excellent first story! I enjoy reading Tanki stories just as much, if not more, than other stories. (Random to Random: nice job insulting yourself, it's common knowledge you only write random stories). As good as the plot is right now, it can definitely be strengthened if you incorporated some more description to make the reader feel like they are in the story. Kaisdf is right, your italics, bolds, strikethroughs, though they do attract the reader's attention (SAT prep tip), they also are slightly distracting. Also, you may want to add transitions into your story. I noticed a lot of "Carter", "he", "the", and several more. Adding some transitions into your stories will give you some more flair into your plot as well as give the reader a sense of the time. Another thing that I noticed was that you used X2, 6v6, 80k, which should be (double, teams of six, eighty thousand crystals) Those words are more 'game slang', so it should be kept to dialogue only. (don't forget: write out every number below twenty or fifty, im not sure which one you stop writing them out at). Overall, though, I really enjoyed the plot! I can't wait for the next installment!

Great work! Though I am procrastinating working hard on a similar article, I like the unique way you described gauss. In my opinion, though, this is more of a small review than a guide, though it is nonetheless very descriptive and helpful to readers. However, there were some things that slightly stood out to me: the alignment of the text and the fact that you put paragraph intros. Center looks a little odd, but it works. Also, if you were to say it was an intro, it would be better to not write anything or write something related, because right now it looks like an FAQ page as opposed to a guide. You might want to consider adding the second paragraph into your intro - intros into an article are often much shorter. All in all, it was an amazing article.

Of course, i wonder about the past era of Tanki. Have you ever played 2009 Tanki?

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ples no discrimin against those who haven't discovered spoilers lol jk

Lol I thought these two topics were super unrelated. 70 665 (though this isn't my computer so idk when adblocker was installed)

Chapter One: The First Battles With a stroke of luck, the two of us were at Percy’s house, registering for a game together. It was difficult to hang out with Percy alone, once he had acclimated to the rest of my friends from third grade, he hardly spent time with our fourth grade friends. But finally, we were enjoying some time together, ready to start our journey as best buddies in this new game. As we went on to the registration page, we started thinking of nicknames. As always, being the secretive one, I called myself Random while Percy went with something along the lines of Anonymous11. Joining our first battle, we tried to familiarize ourselves with the foreign game. Both of us succumbed to a stronger player with a tall hull, a Dictator with Smoky, and learned to face the hectic events of the game. Clicking on the notification at the top (“buy an item in the garage!”) I exited the scene, eager to make my first purchase. Quickly, I bought a Wasp, as my friend had advised me. I would have bought Hornet, his favorite hull, but it was unavailable at my rank. Since he had urged us to play this game in the first place, he also imparted several other pieces of advice unto me prior to registration: to buy Railgun, not to micro-upgrade, and so on. However, when I saw that the upgrade only cost ten out of my thousand crystals, I quickly chose otherwise. Making my way back to the battle, I strived for success, but it was quite limited. Though my fingers were quite nimble, making the correct decisions, many overpowered turrets waged war upon me, and I was blasted three times with an elusive missile. Percy was faring no better, as a pair of dominating Twins ruthlessly destroyed him, running rings around most of our teammates. In the end, it was a horrific loss, and I had only gained a small handful of crystals and experience, as well as two stars. Most weren’t as lucky: half the team hadn’t even managed to cobble together enough score for a star. Taking a quick break to buy a Firebird and upgrade my equipment, I waited for Percy to decide on a game mode. We only had two choices: Deathmatch and Team Deathmatch, so he chose the team option. This time, we ended up on opposite teams, Percy on Blue and I on Red. Even though we were separated, it was the same as before, the higher-ranked players decided the outcome. Again, I ended up losing, while Percy basked in the glory of Sergeants and Corporals, some of whom also owned a futuristic turret firing lightning, which I would later learn was called Gauss. Hopes of winning the match were bleak, until I discovered the overdrive. While I surged forward from one side of the map (I believe it was called Aleksandrovsk), I almost met my fate. Two Firebirds, a Thunder, and a Twins rushed towards me, together fighting for a piece of me. Knowing my mistake, I retreated, but fell right off and flipped upside down, landing on the side of the ramp like a soggy pancake tossed onto a plate. Hopes of surviving were dismal; I pressed X and Z rapidly, trying to elicit a response, but instead, I missed and hit the Shift button. Not knowing what had happened, I barely saw the outline of a bomb counting down as I turned into a pile of rusted metal. Then, it happened. It was like an atomic bombing had occured, right on this ground. Right then and there, half the Blue team was blasted into the sky, awarding me with sixty points and four more kills. Our team had lost, but in another sense, I had also won. Other Random Works Includes a good amount of depressedado Random and a free drink. Enjoy! [Editorials] Gaining Popularity on the AWS Challenges Conquered! [Editorials] Random's Rewind Kit Review: Avalanche Tanki Personalities Hope and Disappointment Cremate Coming Soon Sorry, no depressado Random at the moment, but you are welcome to have a free drink. Fine Ash - Some Random story I was saving for Scholastics but realized I didn't want to use. Fun times. Tanki Weather and News Channel - Collab article with @pythor20000 and @MRayquaza hope you enjoy! Classified Article

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i dunno but if you want im thinking you can try interviewing people in those and they have to write couplets LOL.... but anyways, it's random being critic time. i liked the whole concept, and it was really cool, like two people rapping. However, the weirdest thing driving me off the wall was the beat being really off, like one line really short and the next one really long. Maybe you'd like to revise your work so you can make it flow more, since it's not extremely readable. Also why not include me jk lol im too busy Also, chat sounds a little forced, but I'm sure that will be fixed next time.

You may have wanted to include 'the Long awaited guide to procrastination'.

woah u didn't use trebuchet

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